Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a more complete, natural response: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., when you got it, who gave it to you, or a short memory). Keep it concise (no more than 4–5 sentences) and avoid repeating words.

例: Yes, I did — I got my first bike when I was seven. My parents bought it for me as a birthday present, and I used to ride it to the park every afternoon with my friends. I remember learning to balance on the grass before I felt confident on the road.

提案: Organize your answer with a topic sentence and two clear supporting reasons using linking words (for example, 'firstly' and 'also'). Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'cost-effective', 'environmentally friendly', 'convenient') and avoid contradictions in the same sentence. Limit to 3–4 sentences and give a specific example or statistic if possible.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Firstly, they are cost-effective and environmentally friendly because they don't require petrol. Also, they are convenient for short trips and many children learn to ride them early, so cycling is common among families in urban and rural areas.

× I had a bike when I was a child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

This sentence is already correct: it uses the past simple tense appropriately to describe possession in childhood. No change needed.

× I think bikes are very popular in our country because it doesn't need any fuel and it's very free and we can travel anywhere but it's slow.

✓ I think bikes are very popular in our country because they don't need any fuel, they give a lot of freedom, and we can travel anywhere, although they are slow.

Errors: incorrect pronoun agreement and awkward wording. 'It doesn't' and 'it's' refer to 'bikes' (plural) so plural pronouns 'they' and 'they don't' should be used (Grammar Problem Type ID 6: Present tense issue and 27: Subject-verb agreement). Also 'very free' is unnatural; use 'give a lot of freedom' or 'are convenient'. 'But it is slow' should be plural and combined more naturally as 'although they are slow'. Suggestions: match pronouns and verbs to plural subject, rephrase 'very free' to 'give a lot of freedom' or 'are convenient', and use a conjunction like 'although' for contrast.

× But it is very popular cause children are very interested in riding bikes.

✓ But they are very popular because children are very interested in riding bikes.

Errors: pronoun disagreement and informal conjunction. 'It is' should be 'they are' to agree with plural 'bikes' (Grammar Problem Type ID 6: Present tense issue and 27: Subject-verb agreement). 'Cause' is informal; use 'because'. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree in number and avoid informal contractions in formal speech.