Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and use correct tense and concise sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence (I didn't have a bike as a child.), then give one or two specific supporting details using correct past and future forms and linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh, um) and incomplete fragments. For example, mention why you couldn't have one (couldn't ride) and a clear plan to learn (I plan to learn cycling because…).

例: I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I never learned how to ride one. However, I would like to learn cycling in the future because it’s great exercise and a convenient way to get around my neighborhood.

提案: Answer directly (Yes/No/Partly) and give specific reasons with clear vocabulary. Use correct nouns (cars, vehicles) and avoid incorrect words like locomotives unless you mean trains. Use linking words (however, because, for example) and quantify if possible. Keep to 2–3 sentences and remove fillers.

例: I think bicycles are less popular now than before because many people prefer cars and electric scooters. For example, in cities more families buy cars for convenience, so fewer people cycle for daily travel.

× Well, to be honest, in my childhood, I don't have any bike because I don't know how to ride a bicycle.

✓ Well, to be honest, in my childhood, I didn't have any bike because I didn't know how to ride a bicycle.

The sentence describes past time ('in my childhood') but uses present tense verbs ('don't have', 'don't know'). Use past tense ('didn't have', 'didn't know') to match the time frame. Suggestion: when referring to past events, change present simple to past simple. You should also consider using 'a bicycle' or 'any bicycles' for clarity.

× But in future I have, uh, in my mind that I would like to learn cycling because it's good for your health.

✓ But in the future I have in mind that I would like to learn to ride a bicycle because it's good for my health.

The phrase refers to future intention. 'In future' is better as 'in the future'. 'I have in my mind that' is awkward; use 'I have in mind' or 'I would like to'. 'Learn cycling' is nonstandard; use 'learn to ride a bicycle' or 'learn cycling' -> 'learn to cycle'. Also 'your health' should match the speaker's perspective: 'my health'. Ensure modal 'would like' is used for politeness about future desire.

× Like it's.

✓ For example, it's healthy.

The fragment 'Like it's.' is incomplete and lacks a clear meaning or verb phrase. This is a sentence structure error: every sentence needs a subject and a verb. Make it a complete thought such as 'For example, it's healthy' or link it to the prior clause: 'because it's good for my health.'

× Umm, well, I think so.

✓ Umm, well, I think so.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; it correctly uses present simple to express a general opinion. No change needed.

× And in recent years, uh, my cycles are being replaced by more modern, uh, locomotives like like electric cars and, you know, various sports cars.

✓ And in recent years, bicycles have been being replaced by more modern vehicles like electric cars and various sports cars.

Several issues: 'my cycles' is odd unless referring to the speaker's personal bikes; context suggests general bicycles, so use 'bicycles'. The passive progressive 'are being replaced' with 'in recent years' should be present perfect passive 'have been replaced' or 'have been being replaced' (less common). Use 'vehicles' rather than 'locomotives' ('locomotives' refers to trains). Remove duplicate 'like like'. Suggestion: 'bicycles have been replaced by more modern vehicles.'

× So way less amount of people.

✓ So there are far fewer people using them.

This fragment is ungrammatical. 'Less amount of people' is incorrect: countable noun 'people' requires 'fewer' not 'less' and 'amount' is incorrect with countable nouns. Also the sentence lacks a verb and subject. Rephrase to 'So far fewer people use them' or 'So there are far fewer people using them.'