Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail. Fix tense and word choice (use past simple), avoid unnecessary words. For example say you owned a bike, mention how you used it or who you rode with. Keep to 1–3 sentences and use a linking word if you add details.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it to school and around my neighborhood almost every day, which helped me become confident on the road.

提案: Make the sentence structure clear and use linking words to organize ideas. Start with a topic sentence stating your opinion, then give specific supporting details using connectors like 'for example' or 'also'. Correct common errors: say 'many people ride at the weekend', 'to exercise and stay healthy', and 'families often go cycling in parks or on long rides'. Keep responses concise (2–3 sentences).

例: Yes, cycling is very popular in my country. For example, many people ride at the weekend to exercise and stay healthy, and families often go cycling together in parks or on long rides.

× Yes, of course, when I try I have a bike.

✓ Yes, of course, when I was young I had a bike.

The student is answering a past-time question ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?'), so past tense should be used. 'When I try' is incorrect and likely a mistaken word; use 'when I was young' or 'when I was a child'. Also 'have' should be in the past form 'had' to match the past context. Suggestion: use consistent past time expressions and past-tense verbs for past events.

× Yes, cycling is very popular in my country and it is so many people ride by at the weekend to exercise and stay healthy and family often go cycling together in park or a long arrivals.

✓ Yes, cycling is very popular in my country, and many people ride bikes at the weekend to exercise and stay healthy. Families often go cycling together in parks or on long rides.

This sentence has several issues: the pronoun and determiners are incorrect ('it is so many people' is ungrammatical) and noun forms are wrong ('family' should be plural 'families' when speaking generally). Also prepositions and collocations are incorrect ('ride by' -> 'ride bikes', 'in park' -> 'in parks', 'a long arrivals' -> 'long rides'). The correction uses proper pluralization, removes the meaningless 'it is', uses the correct preposition 'at the weekend' (or 'on weekends'), and correct collocations 'go cycling', 'parks', 'long rides'. Suggestion: separate ideas into two sentences, use plural nouns for general statements, and use standard collocations for activities and places.