Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời ngắn gọn và dễ hiểu nhưng còn một số điểm cần cải thiện: 1) Cấu trúc câu chủ đề nên rõ ràng hơn; 2) Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác (ví dụ: “because it's faster and fun” → “because it was faster and more fun”); 3) Tăng thêm thông tin chi tiết cụ thể để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn (ví dụ nêu kỷ niệm, lợi ích khi đi xe đạp, hoặc mô tả chiếc xe). Hãy nối các câu bằng liên từ để mạch lạc hơn và giữ độ dài tối đa 4-5 câu.

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was six, and I remember learning to ride in our yard. I rode to school every day because it was faster than walking and much more fun, especially with my friends. Riding also helped me feel independent and fit.

提案: Câu trả lời gặp vấn đề về ngữ pháp và lựa chọn từ: tránh lỗi cấu trúc như “buys a very common”; cần nói rõ hơn và cụ thể hơn (ví dụ tỷ lệ người dùng, vùng nông thôn so với thành thị, lý do phổ biến). Dùng liên từ để kết nối ý và mở rộng thêm 2–3 câu hỗ trợ để đáp ứng yêu cầu “Basic Structure” và “Content”.

例: Yes, bikes are still very popular in my country, especially in rural areas where they are inexpensive and practical. Many people use them for short trips like going to the market or taking children to school. In cities, people also ride bikes to avoid traffic and save money on transport.

× Yes, of course buys a very common in our country.

✓ Yes, of course bikes are very common in our country.

The original sentence has a verb form error and word order problem. 'Buys' is incorrect here; the subject intended is 'bikes' (plural), so use 'are' to state existence/characteristic. Also 'a' should be removed because 'bikes' is plural. Correct structure: subject + linking verb + complement. Suggestion: identify the subject (bikes) and use the correct verb form 'are' for plural subjects.

× People use them for daily activities like buying foods, going to school.

✓ People use them for daily activities like buying food and going to school.

'Foods' is usually uncountable when referring to types of food in general; use 'food' without -s. Also coordinate parallel activities with 'and' rather than a comma. Suggestion: use uncountable 'food' and ensure parallel structure: 'buying food and going to school.'

× I rode to school every day because it's faster and fun, that's all.

✓ I rode to school every day because it was faster and more fun, that's all.

The sentence mixes past tense 'rode' with present tense 'it's' and 'fun'. Maintain past tense: change 'it's' to 'it was' and use comparative 'more fun' to compare. Suggestion: keep consistent tense (past) throughout when referring to past habits and use 'more' for comparative adjective 'fun'.