Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be accurate, concise and directly answer the question. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly addresses the question (e.g., “No, I didn’t have a bike as a child.”). Correct factual errors (you said “bag” instead of “bike”) and avoid repetition. Add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (because/so/therefore) to explain why you didn’t have one and the result (e.g., didn’t learn to ride). Keep responses to no more than 3–4 sentences and use precise vocabulary (afford, learn to ride, upbringing).

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. We couldn’t afford one, so I never had the chance to learn to ride. As a result, I only learned to cycle much later when I was an adult.

提案: Make your answer more natural and specific. Begin with a clear opinion (Yes/No and degree: fairly/very). Use linking words to organize reasons (for example, because, for instance, also). Correct grammar and plural forms (“countries” → “country”, “person” → “people”). Provide one or two concrete examples or statistics if possible and avoid filler words like “umm.” Use a wider range of vocabulary such as commute, leisure, sport, and environmental reasons to support your view.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people use bicycles to commute in cities, and there has been a growth in cycling clubs and events such as triathlons. This popularity is partly because cycling is affordable and environmentally friendly.

× No, I didn't have a bag when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The student answered 'No' to having a bike but wrote 'bag', which is a lexical error rather than grammar; however it creates mismatch with context. Replace 'bag' with 'bike' to match the question. Suggestion: listen to the question and reuse key nouns to avoid such inaccuracies.

× Uh, we cannot afford a bike.

✓ Uh, we could not afford a bike.

The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so a past-tense modal form is required. 'Cannot' is present; 'could not' correctly expresses inability in the past. Suggestion: use past modal 'could' or 'couldn't' when referring to past ability or possibility.

× So until I grew up, I didn't learn how to ride a bike.

✓ So until I grew up, I didn't learn to ride a bike.

After 'learn' the infinitive without 'how' is more natural: 'learn to ride a bike.' Also 'until I grew up' plus past reference is acceptable. Suggestion: prefer 'learn to do something' or 'learn how to do something' — if using 'how' place it before the verb: 'I didn't learn how to ride a bike.' Either 'learn to ride' or 'learn how to ride' is correct; keep past tense consistency.

× I think yes bikes are popular in my countries since I see umm person riding a bike and some are also doing triathlon and cycling.

✓ I think yes, bikes are popular in my country because I see people riding bikes and some also do triathlons and cycle.

Multiple issues addressed but limited to types in the list: 'countries' should be singular 'country' (singular/plural issue) and present tense/plural agreement: 'person' should be plural 'people'; 'bikes' plural with 'people riding bikes' fits. Replaced 'since' with 'because' for clarity (conjunction use) and adjusted verbs: 'do triathlons and cycle' uses present simple for habitual actions. Suggestions: ensure subject-number agreement ('people' not 'person'), use singular 'country' if referring to one country, and use parallel verbs for activities ('do triathlons and cycle').