Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, accurate and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "like" repeated) and incorrect phrases ("I'm used to carefully" is incorrect). Also keep sentences shorter and natural; mention an exact age if uncertain, and explain briefly why you stopped riding.

例: Yes, I did. I rode my bike almost every day from about age three and loved exploring the neighbourhood with my friends. However, I cycle less now because I have a busy schedule and I no longer see those friends as often, so I rarely have the chance to go out for a ride.

提案: Make your answer more structured and use specific examples and linking words. Begin with a clear opinion, then give two concrete reasons (e.g., commuting short distances, recreational use) and an example or comparison. Avoid vague phrases like "maybe" and improve accuracy in collocations ("going to buy groceries," "short trips").

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Indonesia. Firstly, many people use them for short-distance commuting, such as going to local shops or schools. Secondly, cycling is common for exercise and leisure, especially on weekends when families and friends go for rides together.

× Yes I did, I used to ride my bike every single day when I was a child, like when I was like 2 years old and I enjoyed exploring the neighborhood with my friends.

✓ Yes, I did. I used to ride my bike every single day when I was a child, even when I was two years old, and I enjoyed exploring the neighborhood with my friends.

Run-on sentence and repetitive filler 'like' corrected; spell out numbers below ten (two). Added a period to separate independent clauses for clarity. Use 'even when' to emphasize age; this keeps past tense consistent. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× I don't cycle much now because I'm busy and I just grew apart with my old friends but sometimes I'm used to carefully.

✓ I don't cycle much now because I'm busy and I have grown apart from my old friends, but sometimes I ride carefully.

Changed 'grew apart with' to 'have grown apart from' (correct preposition and present perfect to show change over time). 'I'm used to carefully' is ungrammatical: 'used to' plus verb or 'ride carefully' is correct. Replaced with 'ride carefully' to express the intended meaning. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Yeah, I think bikes are very popular in my country, especially Indonesia.

✓ Yeah, I think bikes are very popular in my country, especially in Indonesia.

Added preposition 'in' before country name for correct location expression. Present tense 'think' remains appropriate. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Sometimes people use it for sports and sometimes people use it even for transportation, like going from home to groceries and buying things near houses or maybe exploring with friends.

✓ Sometimes people use them for sports and sometimes people even use them for transportation, like going from home to the grocery store, buying things near their houses, or exploring with friends.

Changed singular 'it' to plural 'them' to agree with plural 'bikes' (pronoun agreement). Reordered 'even' for natural placement. Replaced 'groceries' with 'the grocery store' for clarity and used 'their houses' to match plural subject. Maintains present tense. Grammar problem type ID: 12