Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct grammar and be relevant to the question. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, use past tense for childhood, and keep it concise (1–2 sentences). Avoid unrelated words (you said “bag” instead of “bike”).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle that I used to ride around the neighborhood every afternoon.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because or for instance). Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles, pronouns) and avoid repetition. Keep length under 5 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them to commute. For example, students and office workers often cycle to school or work to avoid traffic, and cycling is seen as an environmentally friendly and inexpensive option.

× Yes, I have a bag when I were a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used present tense 'have' and incorrect noun 'bag' instead of past tense 'had' and correct noun 'bike' matching the question about a bike. Also 'were' is incorrect for the singular first person in past tense; use 'was'. Suggestion: use past simple for past situations: 'I had a bike' and 'I was a child.'

× Yes, there are a lot of people riding a bike in our country and it's really popular and there's a lot of people, they go to work, they go to school riding a bike.

✓ Yes, many people ride bikes in our country; it's very popular. Many people go to work and school by bike.

The original uses 'a lot of people' redundantly and mixes plural/singular noun forms 'a bike' with 'people'. Also the verb forms are inconsistent: use 'many people ride' (simple present) for habitual actions. Use plural 'bikes' or the structure 'by bike'. Suggest using concise sentences and correct subject-verb agreement: 'people ride bikes' or 'people go to work by bike.'

× It's really a good choice to relieve the traffic.

✓ It's a good way to reduce traffic congestion.

The phrase 'relieve the traffic' is awkward and ungrammatical. Use 'reduce traffic' or 'reduce traffic congestion'. Also 'choice' is possible but 'way' is more natural here. Suggest using collocations: 'reduce traffic' or 'relieve traffic congestion.'

× The also very green.

✓ They are also very environmentally friendly.

'The' is incorrect; likely intended 'They'. Also 'very green' is colloquial; better to say 'environmentally friendly' or 'eco-friendly.' The sentence lacked a verb; include 'are'. Suggest: 'They are also very environmentally friendly.'