Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (use past tense consistently), make the response more concise and clearer, and add a brief specific detail. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then one or two supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. We only had bicycles at home, and my family owned just one motorbike which my father used for commuting. As a result, I usually rode my bicycle to school and nearby shops.

提案: Make the answer more fluent by removing fillers and correcting grammar (subject-verb agreement). Give one or two specific reasons and a brief example or consequence, using linking words (because, so, therefore). Keep it to 2–3 sentences maximum.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because cars are much more expensive and fuel-efficient two-wheelers are cheaper to run. Moreover, because traffic in cities like Hyderabad is heavy, many people prefer bikes so they can travel more quickly and park easily.

× I don't have a bike in my childhood because we do only have cycles at my childhood.

✓ I didn't have a bike in my childhood because we only had cycles then.

The sentence refers to a past time 'childhood' so present tense 'don't have' and present 'do only have' are incorrect. Change to past simple 'didn't have' and 'had'. Also reposition 'only' before the verb phrase for natural word order. Suggestion: use past tense for events in the past and place adverbs like 'only' before the main verb.

× There is only one bike in my entire family where it where it was used by my father.

✓ There was only one bike in my entire family, and it was used by my father.

The sentence describes a past situation, so 'There is' should be 'There was'. The original also repeats 'where it' unnecessarily and lacks a coordinating conjunction. Correct punctuation and add 'and' to link clauses. Suggestion: use 'There was' for past existence and remove redundant words.

× Yes, bikes are most popular in our country because uh cars were more expensive than uh than bikes.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our country because cars are more expensive than bikes.

Mixing present ('are most popular') and past ('were more expensive') causes tense inconsistency. The general statement about popularity and relative prices should be in present simple: 'bikes are very popular' and 'cars are more expensive'. Also 'most popular' implies the highest degree; 'very popular' or 'quite popular' is more natural here. Remove repeated 'than'.

× Most of the people prefer buying bikes due to due to the high traffic uh, in our country, mostly in Hyderabad, everyone are preferring to have a 2 wheel uh, two Wheeler so they can ride comfortably uh, without.

✓ Most people prefer buying bikes due to the heavy traffic in our country, especially in Hyderabad. Everyone prefers to have a two-wheeler so they can ride comfortably.

'Most of the people' is better as 'Most people' (quantifier use). Remove duplicated 'due to'. 'High traffic' is better as 'heavy traffic'. 'Everyone are preferring' is incorrect because 'everyone' is singular and takes 'prefers' (subject-verb agreement) and the verb should be simple present for habitual action: 'prefers'. '2 wheel' should be 'two-wheeler'. The sentence fragment ends with 'without' — remove incomplete phrase. Suggestions: use simple present for general habits, match quantifiers naturally, ensure subject-verb agreement with 'everyone', and avoid repetitions.