Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap zaman uyumuna ve dilbilgisine dikkat etmeli; kısa ve net bir giriş cümlesiyle başlayıp 1-2 destekleyici cümle eklemelisin. Örneğin geçmiş zaman kullanırken 'had' gibi doğru yardımcı fiilleri kullan; ayrıca cümleleri bağlarken 'and' veya 'which' gibi bağlantı sözcüklerini ve kısa detayları kullanarak ifadeyi doğal yap. Maksimum 5 cümle içinde kal ve gereksiz tekrar yapma.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small, slightly old bicycle and its color was red. I remember riding it around my neighborhood with my friends after school, which was my favorite way to relax. Although it was old, it was reliable and I used it every day during summer.

提案: Cevap doğrudan soruya yanıt vermiş, ancak tekrar eden ifadelerden kaçınılmalı ve daha spesifik destekleyici nedenler verilmelidir. Bağlaçlar (for example, because, however) kullanarak mantıksal akışı güçlendir; ayrıca kısa detaylar ekle (örneğin altyapı, iklim, kültür) ve sonuçla bitir. 2-4 cümle yeterli olur.

例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. This is mainly because cities have limited cycling infrastructure and people prefer cars or trains for convenience. For example, there are few bike lanes and long distances between neighborhoods, so most people choose motorized transport.

× I have a bike when I was a child, it was a little bit old and its color was red.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child; it was a little bit old and its color was red.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time expression 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' to match the time frame. Also replace the comma splice with a semicolon or period to connect two independent clauses correctly. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for past events and separate independent clauses with a semicolon or period.

× In my opinion, bikes are not popular in my country because most people use cars or trains in my country.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are not popular in my country because most people use cars or trains.

Repeating 'in my country' is unnecessary and makes the sentence awkward. Additionally, the present simple 'are' is correct for general statements, so no tense change is needed. Suggestion: Remove redundant phrases to make the sentence concise and natural.