Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 文法と発音のミス（重複語や時制の一致）を直し、より自然で簡潔な回答にする練習をしましょう。具体的には：①重複した語（“I I”）を消す、②過去形は一貫して“started”などにする、③トピック文の後に短い補足（理由や感情）を一文加える。語順を整え、5文以内で簡潔に伝えることを意識してください。

例: Yes. I had a bicycle as a child because my parents gave it to me for my birthday. I started learning to ride it when I was about seven, and I was really excited to be able to ride around the neighborhood. Riding that bike made me feel independent and I used it to visit friends and go to the park.

提案: 語法と語彙の自然さを改善しましょう。具体的には：①複数形や冠詞を正しく使う（“many students”）、②語順と表現を滑らかにする（“a common/important way to get around the city”など）、③補足として理由や比較を一つ加えると説得力が増します。接続詞（because、so、therefore）を使って文をつなげてください。

例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular. As a university student, I see many students riding bikes to campus because they are cheap and convenient. In many cities, cycling is often faster than driving during rush hour, so it’s an important way for people to get around.

× Yes, when I was a child I I start started to learn how to ride a bicycle because my parents gave me a bicycle as a birthday present.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I started to learn how to ride a bicycle because my parents gave me a bicycle as a birthday present.

The sentence contains an incorrect verb form 'start' alongside 'started'. Use the past simple 'started' to match the past time frame 'when I was a child'. Remove the extra 'start' and the duplicated 'I'. Suggestion: use a single past simple verb for completed actions in the past and avoid word duplication.

× Now I am a university student and many student go to university by bike and it's a critical way to move in city.

✓ Now I am a university student and many students go to university by bike and it's a common way to get around the city.

The noun 'student' should be plural 'students' because 'many' requires a plural noun. Also 'in city' is ungrammatical; use 'the city'. 'Critical way to move' is odd in English; 'common way to get around' is a natural expression. Suggestion: match quantifiers with plural nouns and use natural collocations like 'get around the city'.