Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organize the answer with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details. Reduce filler words (umm) and correct small errors (e.g., 'spike' is unclear). Use a linking word to connect the memory to the reason. Aim for 2–3 sentences, each grammatical and natural.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was about to start high school. I remember my parents taking me to a store to choose a sturdy bike, because the school was about a 15-minute ride from home.

提案: Start with a clear opinion, then add one specific supporting detail and a brief contrast using a linking word. Remove repetitions and filler sounds. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'motorbikes' or 'scooters' and 'popular among'). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Vietnam, especially among high school students for short journeys. However, in big cities like Ho Chi Minh City, many people switch to motorbikes because they are faster and better suited for longer commutes.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was about to start high school.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was about to start high school.

Using 'did have' with a past time expression is unnecessary; simple past 'had' is the correct form to state a past possession. Use 'had' for a statement about the past rather than 'did have' unless you are adding emphasis.

× I still remember my parents umm took me to a bike store to choose umm, my old spike and my old bike umm because the high school would be like 15 minutes biking.

✓ I still remember my parents took me to a bike store to choose my old bike because the high school was about a 15-minute bike ride away.

Sentence structure is awkward and contains incorrect or unclear words ('spike'). Replace 'would be like 15 minutes biking' with a clear past-time description 'was about a 15-minute bike ride away.' Remove unnecessary fillers and redundant phrases. Ensure correct noun ('bike') and use hyphenated adjective '15-minute' before 'bike ride.'

× Yes, umm, they're pretty much popular in Vietnam, especially for umm, young students like in high school.

✓ Yes, they're quite popular in Vietnam, especially among young students in high school.

Use 'popular among' rather than 'popular for' to express groups that find something popular. 'Pretty much popular' is informal and awkward; 'quite popular' is clearer. 'Like in high school' should be 'in high school' or 'among high school students' for correct preposition and noun phrase.

× Uh, but I, I believe that after high school, like motorbike would be a much more convenient, umm, method of transport in Ho Chi Minh.

✓ But I believe that after high school, a motorbike would be a much more convenient method of transport in Ho Chi Minh City.

Use the indefinite article 'a' before 'motorbike' when speaking generally. 'Ho Chi Minh' should be 'Ho Chi Minh City' for the place name. Remove filler words and extra commas for clarity. 'Method of transport' is acceptable but 'mode of transport' is more natural; either is fine.