Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сосредоточьтесь на ясной структуре: начните с непосредственного ответа, затем добавьте 1–2 поддерживающих предложения с конкретными деталями и используйте связку для плавного перехода. Исправьте грамматические ошибки времени и формы глаголов, сократите повторения, используйте подходящие прилагательные и фразы для описания воспоминаний. Например, вместо «I often go inside» скажите «I often rode my bike with friends»; замените «AI forgettable memories» на «unforgettable memories». Также ограничьте ответ максимум пятью предложениями.

例: Yes, I did. I was a big fan of cycling and I often rode my bike around the neighbourhood with my friends. Those outings created unforgettable memories because we explored new streets and raced each other. Even now I still enjoy cycling regularly to stay fit.

提案: Дайте прямой ответ, затем поясните причину(ы) и приведите конкретный пример. Избегайте неясных слов и ошибок в согласовании, артиклях и лексике (например, «she'll» и «asthma in Omato» непонятны). Используйте связки (because, for example, therefore) и конкретные факты: «bike lanes», «bike-sharing schemes», «cycling clubs». Ограничьте ответ 2–4 предложениями.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. Bicycle use has grown recently because cities have introduced new bike lanes and affordable bike-sharing schemes. For example, my city launched a public bike program last year that many people use for short trips.

× Yes I had a bike entire big fan of cycling and when I used to be a child I often go inside with my bike with my friends and it was AI forgettable memories and I now I'm also keep keep cycling.

✓ Yes, I had a bike and was a big fan of cycling. When I was a child, I often went out with my bike with my friends; those were unforgettable memories, and now I still keep cycling.

Several past tense errors and incorrect verb forms are present. 'I had a bike entire big fan' needs rephrasing and correct linking verb: use 'was a big fan'. 'used to be a child' is incorrect; use 'when I was a child' to indicate past time. 'I often go inside' should be past simple 'I often went out' to match past narrative. 'it was AI forgettable memories' is incorrect wording; use 'those were unforgettable memories'. 'I now I'm also keep keep cycling' mixes present and incorrect verb form; use 'now I still keep cycling' or 'I still cycle'. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense for past events, use correct verb forms (was, went), and simplify redundant words.

× Yes Sir, I suggest that she'll very popular in my country and the bike industry is now keep to grow because we have a lot of cycling funds which are everywhere in asthma in Omato, where is.

✓ Yes, sir. I think they are very popular in my country, and the bike industry continues to grow because we have many cycling funds and facilities everywhere.

Incorrect pronoun and many other errors. 'I suggest that she'll very popular' incorrectly uses 'she'll' and 'suggest'; use 'I think they are very popular' to refer to bikes. 'is now keep to grow' should be 'continues to grow' or 'is growing' to express ongoing change. 'cycling funds which are everywhere in asthma in Omato, where is' is unclear and contains improper nouns; replace with 'cycling funds and facilities everywhere'. Suggestion: use correct pronouns to refer to the subject (they for bikes), choose appropriate verbs for progressive meaning (are growing/continues to grow), and remove unclear location words or correct them to real place names.