Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with grammar and word choice, and make your answer more concise and natural. Use correct past-tense forms ("did have" not "did had") and choose appropriate verbs ("ride" rather than "drive" for a bicycle). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Also avoid redundant phrases like "it would lead me" and unnecessary repetition.

例: No, I didn't have a motorbike when I was a child, but I did have a bicycle that I loved. I often rode it to my friend's house, which was about ten minutes away, because it was quick and fun.

提案: Make your response more fluent by combining ideas and using linking words smoothly. Reduce repetition of "convenient" by using synonyms or rephrasing. Add a specific example or brief comparison to support your opinion. Keep answers within 3–4 sentences and use connectors like "because", "so", or "for example" naturally.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular because they help people bypass heavy traffic and are easy to park. For example, many commuters use motorbikes to shorten their travel time during rush hour and to park in small spaces near shops.

× No, I did not have a bike when I was a child, but I did had a bicycle which I loved because it would lead me, it would let me to drive to my friend's house.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child, but I had a bicycle which I loved because it allowed me to ride to my friend's house.

Multiple issues: Using 'did had' is incorrect because auxiliary 'did' requires the base form 'have' (Past tense issue). Also 'would lead me, it would let me to drive' is awkward and incorrect: 'would' implying habitual past can work but 'lead me' is wrong for transportation and 'let me to drive' incorrectly uses 'to' after 'let'. Use simple past 'had' for possession, and 'allowed me to ride' or 'let me ride' for ability/permission. Suggestion: Use 'had' for past possession, and 'allowed me to ride' or 'let me ride' to express that the bicycle enabled travel.

× Yes, I think so. And the reason for that is the convenience it provides while moving through the heavy traffic.

✓ Yes, I think so. The reason is the convenience it provides when moving through heavy traffic.

Pronoun 'that' is unnecessary and wordy here; 'it' refers to 'bikes' but sentence can be clearer. Also 'while moving through the heavy traffic' is wordy: use 'when moving through heavy traffic'. Suggestion: Remove unnecessary pronoun and simplify phrasing to 'when moving through heavy traffic'.

× And also it's very convenient to park it anywhere on the side of a road where it is.

✓ Also, it's very convenient to park them anywhere at the side of the road.

Pronoun and agreement issues: 'it' should match plural 'bikes' so use 'them' or rephrase to avoid pronoun. 'on the side of a road where it is' is awkward and redundant. Use 'at the side of the road' or 'on the roadside'. Suggestion: Use plural pronoun 'them' or rephrase to 'park bikes anywhere at the side of the road' for clarity.