Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating the examiner's question, and give one or two specific supporting details. Keep it natural and within 3–4 sentences. Use simple linking words if adding details (for example, "because" or "and").

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle that my parents bought me for my seventh birthday. I rode it to school and around the neighborhood almost every day because it was fun and convenient.

提案: Start with a clear direct opinion, then give two specific reasons with linking words and a short example. Correct vocabulary and avoid repetition ("easy" used repeatedly). Use precise phrases like "fuel-efficient" or "low cost" instead of informal or unclear phrases. Keep to 3–4 sentences and finish the thought without trailing off.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Firstly, they are fuel-efficient and cheap to maintain, so many people use them to save money. Secondly, they are convenient for short trips in busy cities, for example, many commuters cycle to work to avoid traffic.

× Did you Did you have a bike when you were a child?

✓ Did you have a bike when you were a child?

The student repeated the auxiliary and subject phrase 'Did you' twice, causing a sentence structure error and redundancy. Remove the duplicated words so the question has a single auxiliary + subject + main verb sequence. Suggestion: say 'Did you have a bike when you were a child?' to form a correct past simple question.

× Here spikes are very popular in my country 'cause it's very easy, easy to use and it doesn't need much more fuels to eat. So it's a really easy and uh.

✓ Here bikes are very popular in my country because they are very easy to use and they do not need much fuel. So they are really convenient.

Multiple problems appear: 'spikes' is likely a wrong noun for 'bikes' (word choice), 'it's' incorrectly refers to plural 'bikes' (subject-verb agreement/third person singular), 'need much more fuels to eat' is ungrammatical (wrong collocation, pluralization, and figurative 'to eat' is incorrect). Also the sentence is fragmented. Corrections: use the correct noun 'bikes'; match plural subject with plural verb 'are' and plural pronoun 'they'; use 'because' instead of informal ''cause'; use 'much fuel' (uncountable noun) rather than 'much more fuels'; remove 'to eat' which is inappropriate; replace 'easy' repeated with 'convenient' to avoid redundancy. Suggestion: practice subject-verb agreement for plural nouns and use appropriate collocations for uncountable nouns (fuel), and avoid filler words.