Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer tries to respond but has major grammar and clarity problems. To improve: 1) Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense (e.g., “Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child.”). 2) Use one or two supporting sentences (no more than 5 total) with correct verb forms and linking words (e.g., “I often rode it with my friends around the neighborhood, and we sometimes raced each other.”). 3) Give a specific detail (where you rode, how often, a memorable moment). 4) Avoid short fragments like “Stream together with bicycle” that are unclear. Practice forming full sentences and using past simple consistently.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I rode it almost every day with my friends around our neighborhood, and we sometimes raced on the quiet streets near my house. I remember once riding to the park for the first time and feeling very proud that I could go so far on my own.

提案: The answer gives a basic opinion but has problems with grammar, vocabulary and coherence. To improve: 1) Give a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country.”). 2) Support it with specific reasons using linking words (e.g., “because”, “for example”, “also”). 3) Use correct verb forms and plural nouns (people use bicycles; many children ride them). 4) Provide one concrete example (commuting, exercise, or school children) and avoid irrelevant fragments like “Kiss Pull.” Practice making a 2–3 sentence response that explains why and gives an example.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and children often ride them to school. For example, in my city you can see parents teaching their kids to cycle in parks, and many commuters use bikes to avoid traffic and save money.

× I have a running bicycle when I child play with my friend around the street. Stream together with bicycle.

✓ I had a bicycle when I was a child. I used to ride it with my friend around the street.

IDs: 5 (Past tense issue), 26 (Sentence structure errors), 6 (Present tense issue). The student mixed present and past forms: 'I have' should be past 'I had' to match 'when I was a child'. 'when I child play' is missing auxiliary and correct word order; it should be 'when I was a child' and 'I used to ride it' or 'I rode it' to indicate habitual past action. 'Stream together with bicycle' is unclear and likely an attempt to say they rode together; it must be rewritten as a complete clause. Suggestion: use past tense for childhood memories, include auxiliaries ('was'), and form complete clauses with subject and verb.'

× Bicycle is very popular in my country because a lot of people using for many many children. Kiss Pull.

✓ Bicycles are very popular in my country because a lot of people use them for their children.

IDs: 1 (Singular and plural issue), 27 (Subject-verb agreement errors), 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions). The original uses singular 'Bicycle' instead of plural 'Bicycles' when speaking generally; the verb 'is' should be 'are'. The phrase 'a lot of people using' lacks the correct verb form; it should be 'a lot of people use'. 'using for many many children' is ungrammatical—use 'use them for their children' to show purpose and possession. Remove unclear fragments like 'Kiss Pull'. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use correct verb forms and prepositions (use something for someone).