Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly and naturally. The student repeated the examiner's question instead of responding. To improve, give a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief info), add one or two specific supporting details using linking words, keep it under five sentences, and use correct grammar and vocabulary.

例: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle that my parents bought me when I was seven, and I rode it to school and around the neighborhood every day. Because it was lightweight and easy to handle, I learned to ride confidently within a week.

提案: Be direct and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons or examples using linking words. Avoid redundancy and incorrect phrases (e.g., 'every people', repeated 'vehicles'). Use more precise vocabulary and correct grammar.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many people cycle in parks and on dedicated bike lanes, and this is partly because biking is cheaper and healthier than taking public transport. Additionally, the local government has improved cycling infrastructure in recent years, which has encouraged more commuters to ride.

× Yeah, I think that parks are very popular in my country and every people try to use bikes instead of public transportation or personal vehicles vehicles.

✓ Yeah, I think that bikes are very popular in my country and people try to use bikes instead of public transportation or private vehicles.

The original sentence has quantifier and word-choice issues. 'Parks are very popular' conflicts with the question about bikes; the intended subject is 'bikes'. 'Every people' is ungrammatical; use 'people' or 'everyone'. 'Personal vehicles vehicles' repeats 'vehicles' and 'personal' is better replaced by 'private'. Suggestion: keep the topic consistent with the question (bikes), use 'people' or 'everyone' instead of 'every people', and avoid repetition by choosing one noun (e.g., 'private vehicles').