Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy and natural phrasing. Use past tense consistently for past experiences, reduce redundancy, and keep the answer concise (max 3–4 short sentences). Add a brief specific detail to enrich the response (e.g., age when you got it or where you rode it).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a simple, non-electric bicycle that I learned to ride at about seven years old, mostly around my neighborhood. I remember practicing every afternoon until I could ride without help.

提案: Make your answer more fluent and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific reasons using linking words. Remove filler words (uh) and correct grammar (e.g., 'easy to maintain'). Use a wider range of vocabulary (affordable, cost-effective, convenient) and give a brief example or statistic if possible.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Firstly, they are much more affordable than cars, so many people can buy them. Secondly, they are cheap to maintain and convenient for short trips in cities, for example many students and commuters use bikes every day.

× Yes, I do have a bike when I was child, but it was not electric, it was manual and I had to run it by my feet.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but it was not electric; it was manual and I had to pedal it with my feet.

The sentence mixes present tense 'do have' with past time reference 'when I was child.' Use past tense 'had' for actions in the past. Also add the definite article 'a' before 'child.' 'Run it by my feet' is incorrect collocation; use 'pedal it with my feet' or simply 'pedal it.' Use a semicolon or separate clauses to improve clarity.

× Yes uh, in my opinion, the bikes are really common in our country because uh as compared to the car, the bike feels so economical.

✓ Yes, in my opinion, bikes are really common in our country because, compared to cars, bikes feel much more economical.

'The bikes' and 'the car' are incorrect article use here. When speaking generally use plural without 'the': 'bikes' and 'cars.' Also change 'feels' to 'feel' to agree with plural subject 'bikes.' Replace 'as compared to' with 'compared to' and 'so economical' with 'much more economical' for natural comparative phrasing.

× Everyone can afford this and it's easy to ride and it's uh very economical to maintained in a good way.

✓ Everyone can afford one, and it's easy to ride, and it's very economical to maintain.

'This' is vague; use 'one' to refer to a bike. 'It's uh very economical to maintained' contains incorrect verb form 'maintained' and unnecessary words 'in a good way.' Use base verb 'maintain' after 'to.' Remove filler 'uh' and streamline the sentence for clarity.

× So yes, bikes are very common.

✓ So yes, bikes are very common.

This sentence is correct in tense and usage and needs no change. It states a general present fact about bikes, so simple present tense 'are' is appropriate.