Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy, use a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations and filler words, and give one specific supporting detail using linking words. Correct verb tenses (use past tense), plural/singular forms, and vocabulary (e.g., 'learned to ride' not 'teach me bikings').

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was about nine years old. I used to ride it every day with my neighbor, and my father taught me how to balance and steer. For example, he would run beside me until I could ride without training wheels. As a result, I became confident riding on quiet streets.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, avoid fillers, and support your opinion with specific reasons or examples using linking words. Correct phrasing (e.g., 'children often receive bikes as birthday presents') and provide one or two concrete reasons why bikes are popular (cost, convenience, culture).

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. For instance, many parents buy bicycles as birthday presents for their children because they are affordable and encourage outdoor play. In addition, bikes are practical for short trips in crowded cities, so adults often use them too.

× Yes, I have bike when I was I think umm, 9 years old.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was, I think, about 9 years old.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past-time reference 'when I was 9 years old' and omits the article 'a' before the singular countable noun 'bike'. Use past tense 'had' for a past situation and include the indefinite article 'a'. Also add commas for clarity and the word 'about' is optional to reflect uncertainty.

× I often play with my neighbor and my father always teach me bikings.

✓ I often played with my neighbor and my father always taught me how to ride a bike.

The speaker refers to past habitual actions, so past tense verbs 'played' and 'taught' are required rather than present 'play' and 'teach'. 'Bikings' is not a correct noun; use 'how to ride a bike' or 'bike riding'. Also include the article 'a' before 'bike'.

× Especially the bike that don't have any uh, guys or other three wheels at the back.

✓ Especially the bike that doesn't have any extra wheels or other three wheels at the back.

Subject-verb agreement: 'bike' (singular) requires 'doesn't' rather than 'don't'. The phrase 'guys' is incorrect here; likely intended 'gears' or 'extra'/(assistive) 'training' wheels. Clarify vocabulary: use 'extra wheels' or 'training wheels'. Keep word order and meaning clear.

× Yes, umm, I think umm, bikes are very popular in our country and mostly uh, kids are having birthday.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in our country, and often kids have birthdays when they receive them as gifts.

The original mixes awkward phrasing 'kids are having birthday' which is ungrammatical; use 'kids have birthdays' or better rephrase the intended meaning. Present simple 'are very popular' is fine; maintain consistent tense and clearer structure. Added clarification to connect popularity with gift-giving.

× They always give presents which is bike.

✓ They are often given presents that are bikes.

Original has mismatch between plural 'presents' and singular 'is bike'. Use plural agreement 'that are bikes' or rephrase 'they often give bikes as presents'. Also consider passive or active: 'Parents often give children bikes as presents' for clarity.