Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is short and contains a mistake in tense (you should use past tense for childhood). To improve, give a direct topic sentence in past tense and add one brief supporting detail (reason or memory). Keep it natural and under 5 sentences. Use linking words like “and” or “because” if you add information.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle when I was about seven, and I used to ride it to my friend’s house every afternoon.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammar and fluency issues (hesitations, preposition and verb form errors, and redundancy). Improve by starting with a clear topic sentence, remove fillers, use correct verb forms and prepositions, and add one specific example or reason with a linking word (e.g., “because” or “for example”). Keep it concise (1–3 sentences).

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are inexpensive and convenient. For example, many students and families cycle to school and the park, especially on weekends.

× Yes, I do.

✓ Yes, I did.

The examiner asked about a past time ('when you were a child'), so the student should use the past tense. 'Do' is present tense; replace with past tense 'did' to match the time frame of the question. Suggestion: Listen for time markers (when you were a child) and shift verbs to past tense accordingly.

× I think so because most of the people in here, umm, ride in or using a bike when they go to the park, to the to the school, anywhere they want to go.

✓ I think so because most people here ride or use a bike when they go to the park, to school, or anywhere else they want to go.

Multiple issues fall under quantifier and related usage: 'most of the people in here' is wordy and unnatural; 'most people here' is correct. 'Ride in or using a bike' mixes verbs and prepositions incorrectly: say 'ride or use a bike.' Also 'to the to the school' repeats 'the' and 'to school' is the usual phrase. Added 'else' after 'anywhere' for naturalness. Suggestion: simplify noun phrases, keep parallel verb forms (ride or use), and avoid article repetition; proofread aloud to catch repetition.