Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words (uh, umm) and incorrect tense/forms (use past simple).

例: Yes, I did. I learned to ride a bike when I was about seven years old because my aunt owned a bike shop. As a result, I practised there often and got comfortable riding on quiet streets near the shop.

提案: Give a direct opinion, then explain with clearer, specific reasons and correct facts. Use linking words (for example, because, also) and avoid vague or incorrect references (e.g., "one day tour of France").

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in Colombia. For example, cycling is a common sport and many people follow professional races like the Vuelta a Colombia; also, bikes are used for short daily trips in cities because they are inexpensive and practical.

× I learned how to ride a bike when I was around 7 years old, maybe before that as my auntie owns a shop where they sell like bikes.

✓ I learned how to ride a bike when I was around seven years old, maybe earlier, because my auntie owned a shop where they sold bikes.

The sentence mixes past and present verbs: 'learned' (past) is correct, but 'owns' and 'sell' are present. Use past tense 'owned' and 'sold' to match the past time frame. Also 'maybe before that' is awkward; 'maybe earlier' or 'maybe before then' fits better. Suggest using consistent past tense when describing past events.

× It's a bike shop and they teach me since I was a kid.

✓ It was a bike shop and they taught me since I was a kid.

The clause 'they teach me since I was a kid' is incorrect because 'since' with a past starting point requires a perfect or past tense reference. Here the student is talking about past habitual actions, so use past tense 'they taught me' or present perfect 'they have taught me since I was a kid' if it continues to present. Also 'It's' should be 'It was' to match past context.

× Umm, most of it because we have a lot of sportsmen back in Colombia where I'm from, they have a one day tour of France or like big.

✓ Umm, mostly because we have many athletes back in Colombia; some of them take part in one-day races in France and in other big events.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Most of it because' is a sentence fragment; change to 'mostly because' to modify the following clause. 'Sportsmen' is better as 'athletes' and 'a one day tour of France' is unclear—likely 'one-day races in France' (such as the one-day classics). Also 'or like big' is informal and vague; replace with 'and in other big events.' Ensure complete sentence structure with subject and verb.

× Did you have a bike when you were a child?

✓ Did you have a bike when you were a child?

This sentence is correct. 'When you were a child' is the appropriate prepositional time phrase; no change is needed.

× Yes, I do think they're popular.

✓ Yes, I do think they're popular.

This sentence is grammatically correct. 'They're' (they are) agrees and 'do think' is acceptable emphasis; no third person singular error is present.