Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct and clear, which is good. To improve, add a brief supporting detail (one or two short phrases) to make the response more natural and informative. Use a linking word if you add more than one detail and avoid filler sounds like “umm.” Keep it to no more than 2–3 sentences total.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it to ride to my friend’s house and for short trips around the neighborhood.

提案: Your answer addresses the question and gives supporting details, but it contains many fillers and some awkward phrasing and repetition. To improve, remove filler words, use clearer linking words (e.g., “not only ... but also,” “for example,” “because”), and be more concise. Provide one or two specific examples or reasons and limit the response to 3–4 sentences for greater coherence.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Not only do children ride them, but many adults use bicycles to commute to work or to exercise because it is cheap and good for health. For example, I often see people cycling in parks and on bike lanes during the morning.

× Uh, so they are not only popular in the kids, but even the elders are starting to use them.

✓ Uh, so they are not only popular with kids, but even the elders are starting to use them.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect with 'popular'; the correct collocation is 'popular with' or 'popular among'. Also 'the kids' is unnatural in this context; use 'kids' or 'children'. Suggestion: use 'popular with kids' or 'popular among children' to sound natural.

× Umm, in my country, they are starting to ride the bicycles for their own purposes, like going to place to place or even for the health purposes to keep themselves healthy and strong.

✓ Umm, in my country, they are starting to ride bicycles for their own purposes, like going from place to place or even for health purposes to keep themselves healthy and strong.

Multiple preposition issues: 'ride the bicycles' should be 'ride bicycles' (no article for general plural), 'going to place to place' should be 'going from place to place', and 'for the health purposes' should be 'for health purposes' (no article). Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles and use the standard prepositional phrase 'from place to place'.