Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear, grammatical, and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two clear supporting details using correct tense and linking words. Mention when/where and how you felt or learned, using correct verb forms (e.g., 'rode' or 'learning to ride'). Avoid fragments and redundant phrases.

例: Yes, I did. I remember learning to ride a bike for the first time in a park with my family when I was about six. I was very nervous at first, but my father helped me and after a few tries I could ride on my own.

提案: Provide a clear general statement, then support it with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words (for example, because, especially, such as) and more natural phrasing (e.g., 'people use bikes to commute to school or work'). Avoid vague phrases like 'going to anywhere'.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many children and teenagers use bikes to travel to school, and some adults cycle to work because it is cheap and convenient.

× Yes I did. I rode the bike when my family at the park when I was a child at the first time I was so nervous to rode a bike alone but. Next time.

✓ Yes, I did. I rode a bike with my family at the park when I was a child. The first time I rode a bike alone I was very nervous, but I tried again later.

Multiple past tense and sentence structure errors: 'rode the bike when my family at the park' is missing a verb (were/was) and the article usage is awkward; use 'with my family at the park'. 'at the first time' is incorrect — use 'the first time'. 'to rode' mixes infinitive and past form; correct is 'rode' or 'to ride' depending on structure. Run-on fragments should be split into clear sentences. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent, use correct articles and verb forms, and split into coherent sentences. Grammar problem type ID:5

× I think especially for the boys because they like to ride a bike and they ride a bike when they are going to anywhere like home and school.

✓ I think they are especially popular with boys because boys like to ride bikes, and they often ride them when they go anywhere, such as to home or school.

Problems with present tense and word choice: 'I think especially for the boys' is ungrammatical — use 'they are especially popular with boys'. Repetition 'ride a bike' is awkward; plural 'bikes' and pronoun 'them' are clearer. 'they are going to anywhere' is incorrect; use simple present 'they go anywhere' or 'they go to places such as home and school.' Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct present tense forms. Grammar problem type ID:6