Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your response does not answer the question. For Part 1 you should reply directly with a clear topic sentence (yes/no) and then add one or two short supporting details. Keep it natural and concise (no more than 3–4 sentences). Use linking words if you add details (for example: “because”, “so”, “also”).

例: Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child. It was a small blue bicycle my parents bought for me, and I rode it to visit friends and practice in the park. Because I loved cycling, I learned to balance quickly and felt very independent.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many fragments. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your opinion. Then give two specific supporting reasons with linking words (for example: “Firstly…”, “Also…”, “For example…”). Use relevant vocabulary (commute, students, market, rural areas) and keep sentences short and logical. Aim for 2–3 sentences only to be natural and effective.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Firstly, many people use them for daily commuting because they are inexpensive and easy to park. Also, students often ride bikes to school and people in small towns use them to go to the market or visit friends.

× And she asked them mostly my money popular in their bikes is more popular in my country mostly Mainly CD is the most used, useful for the daily shoes and going to the school and then bagoger and market are they very useful also. Then my nature town also using.

✓ Bicycles are very popular in my country. They are mainly used for daily tasks such as going to school, shopping at the market, and running errands in my hometown.

The original sentence has multiple problems: unclear word order, missing and incorrect words, and run-on fragments, which fall under sentence structure errors (ID 26). The speaker uses words that do not fit (for example 'money', 'CD', 'shoes', 'bagoger') and mixes several ideas without proper connectors or verb forms. To improve, separate ideas into clear sentences, use correct vocabulary (bicycles, shopping, market, errands), ensure each clause has a subject and verb, and use parallel structure for lists ('going to school, shopping at the market, and running errands'). This yields a coherent, grammatically correct response that matches the present-tense question about general popularity.