Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Améliorez la grammaire et la fluidité en utilisant une structure simple et correcte. Évitez les doubles sujets (« my parents, they ») et les formes verbales incorrectes (« couldn't offered »). Donnez une phrase principale claire puis, si nécessaire, ajoutez un détail court pour expliquer la raison. Utilisez des mots de liaison si vous ajoutez une seconde idée.

例: No, I didn't. My parents couldn't afford a bike when I was a child, so I usually walked to school or used public transport.

提案: Clarifiez le vocabulaire et la cohérence des idées. Utilisez les termes corrects (par exemple « bikes » au lieu de « park ») et reliez les phrases avec des mots de liaison. Expliquez brièvement pourquoi les vélos sont populaires avec un exemple concret et évitez des fragments incomplets comme « Committed for work ».

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them to save time and avoid traffic. For example, commuters often cycle to work in the morning because it is faster than driving in congested areas.

× No I didn't because my parents, they couldn't offered one.

✓ No, I didn't because my parents couldn't offer one.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'couldn't offered' which mixes the modal 'could' with a past participle. After modal verbs like 'could' the base verb form (infinitive without 'to') should be used. Also, the pronoun 'they' is redundant after 'my parents'. Suggestion: Use 'couldn't offer' and remove the extra pronoun. Use a comma after 'No' for clarity.

× Yes, I think park is popular in my country because many people use it to save time. Committed for work.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because many people use them to save time and commute to work.

The original has several issues: 'park' is the wrong noun; context asks about bikes. Use the plural 'bikes' and plural pronoun 'them' to match. 'Use it' should be 'use them' for plural. 'Committed for work' is incorrect phrase; the correct verb is 'commute' and the full phrase is 'commute to work'. Also combine the fragments into one sentence for proper sentence structure. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct noun/pronoun reference.