Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and article usage (e.g., “a bike,” “when I was six”). Avoid filler sounds. Also vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., “learned to ride” instead of “go bike”).

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was six. My father gave it to me as a birthday present, and I was very happy. After that, I learned to ride with his help, practicing in the park every weekend.

提案: Give a clear opinion then support it with specific reasons using linking words. Use correct grammar (plural/singular, verb agreement) and clearer vocabulary (e.g., “public transport,” “private cars”). Avoid repetition. Provide one concrete example or comparison to strengthen the answer.

例: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country, but fewer people use them for daily travel. For example, many commuters prefer public transport or private cars because our cities have good bus and train networks, and cycling can be difficult in busy traffic.

× Ah, yes, yes I did. Uh, I had a bike when I was six years old.

✓ Ah yes, I did. I had a bike when I was six years old.

Minor punctuation/fluency: remove extra filler and repeated words to improve clarity. The past tense 'had' correctly matches the time reference 'when I was six years old.' Suggestion: avoid repeating 'yes' and unnecessary fillers in spoken answers.

× Uh, when I six years old, my dad gave me a so my birthday present.

✓ When I was six years old, my dad gave me a bicycle as a birthday present.

The original sentence omits the verb 'was' and has word order and extra words ('a so my') problems. According to sentence structure rules, include the linking verb 'was' for age expressions and place modifiers correctly: 'a bicycle as a birthday present.' Suggestion: use 'When I was [age]' and 'gave me a [item] as a birthday present.'

× So when I received it, I was so happy. So I learned how to go bike with my father.

✓ When I received it, I was so happy. Then I learned how to ride a bike with my father.

Incorrect verb phrase 'go bike' — English uses 'ride a bike.' 'Learned how to ride a bike' is the correct verb + object structure. Also replace repetitive 'so' with 'then' for sequence. Suggestion: use 'ride a bike' not 'go bike.'

× Yes, I think bike is popular in my country, but many people doesn't use the bike because we have other many other trans transportation.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country, but many people don't use bikes because we have many other types of transportation.

Multiple errors: 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' when speaking generally (singular/plural issue). Subject-verb agreement and negation: 'many people doesn't' is incorrect; use 'don't.' Redundant words 'other many other' and wrong noun 'trans transportation' confusing: replace with 'many other types of transportation.' Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements and match verb form to plural subject.

× So they used to use the transportation not not a bike.

✓ So they usually use other forms of transportation instead of bikes.

'Used to' implies past habitual action; here present habitual is intended. Double 'not' is erroneous. 'Use the transportation' is unnatural; better: 'use other forms of transportation instead of bikes.' Suggestion: for present habits use 'usually' or simple present, and express contrast with 'instead of.'