Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy and clarity; give a clear topic sentence, then 1–2 supporting details using linking words. Use past simple consistently and correct word order. Be concise (max 5 sentences). For example, say you had a bike, who bought it, what you did with it, and why it was memorable. Use linking words such as "then", "so", or "because" to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mother bought it for me, and I often rode it with my friend to explore nearby streets and parks. We raced sometimes and tried new routes, which was exciting because we felt free and independent.

提案: Make your answer more specific and accurate. Begin with a direct opinion sentence, then add 1–2 concrete supporting details and an example. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., "brands" instead of company names unrelated to bicycles) and complete sentences. Avoid vague fragments and unfinished examples.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. You can see many styles on the roads, from simple commuter bikes to modern electric ones, because people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, local brands and some international manufacturers sell affordable models in city markets.

× Or when I was a kid, I remember my mom bought a bicycle gave me and I make with my friend take the bicycle, went to the different place.

✓ When I was a kid, I remember my mom bought a bicycle and gave it to me, and I used to go with my friend on the bicycle to different places.

Multiple issues: incorrect verb forms and sequence of past actions. 'bought a bicycle gave me' needs a conjunction and correct object pronoun ('gave it to me'). 'I make with my friend take the bicycle, went' is ungrammatical; use 'used to go with my friend on the bicycle' to describe habitual past actions, and 'to different places' (plural) is correct. Ensure past tense consistency (remember + past events) and proper word order. Suggested improvement: separate actions clearly, use 'gave it to me' and 'used to' or simple past plural expressions for habitual past.

× It's very interesting and so a different.

✓ It was very interesting and quite different.

'so a different' is incorrect word order and article use. 'different' here needs an adverb (quite/really) and past tense 'was' to match the preceding past description. Use 'quite different' or 'very different' for natural phrasing. Suggested improvement: match tense and use appropriate adverb before 'different'.

× Oh, I think a bicycle is very popular in my country.

✓ Oh, I think bicycles are very popular in my country.

The student used the singular 'a bicycle' when talking about general popularity; general statements require plural ('bicycles') or the zero article with an uncountable noun. Also subject-verb agreement: 'bicycles are'. Suggested improvement: use plural nouns for generalizations.

× You look the different bicycles in the road and from the different country the different company.

✓ You can see different bicycles on the road and from different countries and companies.

Incorrect verbs and prepositions: 'You look the different bicycles in the road' should be 'You can see different bicycles on the road'. Use 'on the road' not 'in the road'. Also pluralize 'countries' and use conjunctions to link ideas: 'and from different countries and companies'. Suggested improvement: use 'see' rather than 'look' for perceiving objects, and 'on the road' for location.

× For example the Alibaba Jing Dong is a famous and.

✓ For example, Alibaba and Jingdong are famous companies.

Sentence is incomplete and has poor noun organization. 'The Alibaba Jing Dong is a famous and.' lacks a noun after 'famous' and wrongly combines two company names without conjunction. Correct by naming both companies and adding 'companies'. Suggested improvement: complete the thought with an appropriate noun and proper coordination ('Alibaba and Jingdong are famous companies').