Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and grammatically correct, start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, avoid repetition, and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words (e.g., because, so, therefore) to connect ideas. Keep the response within 3–4 sentences.

例: No, I didn't have my own bike when I was a child. My parents thought young children weren't ready to handle a vehicle, so they preferred I wait until I was older. Because of that, I usually walked or went with my parents when we needed to travel short distances.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, word choice), avoid unclear phrases like 'quieter popular' and 'wield a bike.' Provide one specific reason and an example, and use linking words for coherence. Limit to 3–4 concise sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. Many people prefer motorcycles or scooters to avoid heavy traffic, especially for short city trips. For example, commuters often use scooters to get to work quickly during rush hour.

× When I was a child, I don't have a bike on my own because my parents thinks in early age children should not wield a vehicle which is not in the capable range of the child.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't have a bike of my own because my parents thought that at an early age children should not use a vehicle that is beyond the child's ability.

Multiple tense and agreement issues: The time clause 'When I was a child' sets past context, so the main verb should be past ('didn't have' instead of 'don't have') (Grammar Problem Type ID 6). 'Parents thinks' is subject-verb agreement error; plural subject requires 'thought' in past (Grammar Problem Type ID 27). 'In early age' is incorrect preposition and noun form; use 'at an early age' (Grammar Problem Type ID 11). 'Wield' is the wrong verb for using a vehicle; use 'use' and simplify 'which is not in the capable range of the child' to 'that is beyond the child's ability' for clarity (Grammar Problem Type ID 13 and 26). Suggestion: Keep consistent past tense for all verbs referring to childhood, ensure plural subjects take plural verbs, use correct prepositions and clearer vocabulary.

× And I think that it is a little little bit risky of getting involved in accidents.

✓ And I thought that it was a little risky to get involved in accidents.

Tense mismatch: 'I think' should match the past context 'When I was a child' and become 'I thought' (Grammar Problem Type ID 6). 'It is a little little bit' has redundancy ('little little bit') and should be 'it was a little risky' (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). 'Risky of getting involved in accidents' is awkward; use the infinitive 'to get involved' after 'risky' (Grammar Problem Type ID 8/26). Suggestion: Use consistent past tense, remove redundant words, and use the infinitive to express purpose or consequence.

× So I don't have a personal vehicle in early age.

✓ So I didn't have a personal vehicle at an early age.

Tense and preposition error: 'Don't have' conflicts with past time reference and should be 'didn't have' (Grammar Problem Type ID 6). 'In early age' is incorrect; use 'at an early age' (Grammar Problem Type ID 11). Suggestion: Maintain past tense for events in childhood and use the correct preposition 'at'.

× Well of course bikes are very quieter popular in my country, because in my country mostly people likes to wield a bike and it is a easier way of traveling to any place without any proper breakthrough from the traffic's.

✓ Well, of course bikes are very popular in my country, because most people like to ride a bike and it is an easy way to travel to places without being hindered by traffic.

Multiple issues: 'Quieter popular' is incorrect word choice; 'quieter' refers to sound and is unnecessary—use 'very popular' (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). 'Mostly people likes' is incorrect word order and subject-verb agreement: use 'most people like' (Grammar Problem Type ID 1 and 27). 'Wield a bike' is wrong verb; use 'ride a bike' (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). 'It is a easier' article error: 'a' before vowel-sound adjective should be 'an easy' (Grammar Problem Type ID 22/17). 'Traveling to any place' is awkward; 'travel to places' is more natural (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). 'Without any proper breakthrough from the traffic's' is ungrammatical: use 'without being hindered by traffic' and remove incorrect possessive 'traffic's' (Grammar Problem Type ID 11 and 12). Suggestion: Use correct adjectives/adverbs, match subject and verb, choose appropriate verbs (ride), use correct articles, and use natural prepositional phrases to describe traffic problems.