Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally good: it directly answers the question, gives specific details (color, training wheels, purpose) and is mostly natural. To improve, make the sentence structure more concise and avoid minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasing (for example, remove the extra word “having” and avoid repeating auxiliary verbs). Keep your answer within 3–4 well-linked sentences using simple linking words (e.g., “so”, “because”, “and”). Also vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., “practice balance” or “gain confidence”).

例: Yes, I did. It was a small red bike with training wheels that helped me learn balance and gain confidence. I used to ride it to my friend’s house almost every afternoon, so I became quite comfortable cycling around the neighborhood.

提案: Your response addresses the question and starts to give reasons, which is good. Improve accuracy by fixing grammar (singular/plural agreement: “bicycles” or “biking”), articles (“urban and rural areas”), and remove duplicated words (“reduce reduce”). Complete the thought at the end and use linking words (e.g., “because”, “while”, “whereas”) to contrast urban and rural reasons. Provide one or two concrete examples or statistics to make it more specific. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially in both urban and rural areas for different reasons. In cities, many people cycle to avoid traffic congestion and to save on commuting costs, whereas in rural areas bikes are useful for short trips to markets or schools. For example, some students ride bicycles several kilometers to get to class every day.

× I did have a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels that helped me learn balance and independence, and I used to ride it to my friend's house almost every afternoon having.

✓ I did have a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels that helped me learn balance and independence, and I used to ride it to my friend's house almost every afternoon.

The final word 'having' is an incorrect use of the -ing form and creates a sentence fragment. The clause 'I used to ride it to my friend's house almost every afternoon' is complete and does not require 'having'. Remove the unnecessary -ing word to form a grammatically correct past habitual statement. Suggestion: avoid adding -ing unless it forms a progressive verb phrase (e.g., 'I was having fun') or a participial clause that clearly links to the main clause.

× Yes, bicycle are quite popular in my country, especially in urban and rural area for different reasons.

✓ Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially in urban and rural areas for different reasons.

The noun forms are incorrect: 'bicycle' should be plural 'bicycles' to agree with the plural verb context, and 'area' should be plural 'areas' because 'urban and rural' refer to two types of places. Use plural nouns when referring to general populations or multiple locations. Suggestion: check whether the subject is general/plural and adjust noun endings accordingly.

× In cities, many people use bikes to avoid traffic congestion and reduce reduce commuting cost while in.

✓ In cities, many people use bikes to avoid traffic congestion and reduce commuting costs.

This sentence has repetition ('reduce reduce'), a singular/plural mismatch ('commuting cost' should be plural 'commuting costs'), and an incomplete trailing fragment ('while in.'). Remove the repeated word, make 'cost' plural to match general meaning, and delete the unfinished fragment to complete the sentence. Suggestion: reread sentences to remove duplicates and ensure every clause is complete; use plural for general, uncountable repeated expenses (commuting costs).