Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise, correct small errors, and add a brief specific supporting detail. Start with a direct topic sentence, fix the numeral to a word, and include a linking word to show contrast or consequence. Keep the answer under five sentences.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Because my parents couldn't afford one, I often borrowed my neighbour's bike to ride to school and the park. As a result, I learned to be careful and share with others.

提案: Make the answer more specific and natural by giving a clear topic sentence, adding a reason with a linking word, and providing one concrete example. Avoid repetitive phrasing and expand vocabulary (e.g., "commonly used" or "a common mode of transport").

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient mode of transport. For example, many people use bicycles to commute short distances to work or to run errands in crowded city centres.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My parents couldn't afford 1 so I usually borrowed my neighbour's bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My parents couldn't afford one, so I usually borrowed my neighbour's bike.

The digit '1' is incorrect in this context; it should be the word 'one'. Also a comma is needed before the conjunction 'so' when joining two independent clauses. Use 'one' instead of '1' in formal writing and add the comma for correct sentence structure.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because we take the bikes to travel around.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because we use them to get around.

The phrase 'take the bikes to travel around' is unnatural and uses verbs improperly for habitual present meaning. Replace with 'use them to get around' which correctly expresses the common present-tense activity of using bikes for local travel. Also 'them' correctly refers back to 'bikes' and avoids repetition.