Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy, sentence structure and fluency. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms and articles, avoid filler sounds, and keep answers concise (no more than 5 sentences). Add a linking word to connect ideas and give a specific detail (e.g., why you liked a particular bike or who gave it to you).

例: Yes, I had several bikes as a child. For example, my first bike was a small red tricycle with three wheels, which my parents gave me when I was four. Later, when I was ten, I bought a blue two-wheel bike from a local shop because I wanted to ride faster and explore my neighborhood.

提案: Answer directly with a full sentence, correct grammar and clearer reasoning. Use linking words (e.g., because, so) and give a specific example or statistic to support your view. Avoid fragmented phrases and incorrect possessive forms.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many children and adults use them for short trips and exercise. For instance, in my town lots of parents buy bicycles for their kids to ride to school or the park, and there are bicycle lanes in several neighborhoods to encourage cycling.

× Yes, I had a few bike uh, one of them is red and it has three wheels.

✓ 'Yes, I had a few bikes. One of them was red and it had three wheels.'

Error: 'a few bike' uses singular 'bike' with 'a few', which requires plural. Also tense consistency: Examiner asked about childhood (past), so use past tense 'was' and 'had' rather than present 'is' and 'has'. Suggestion: Use plural 'bikes' after 'a few' and change present verbs to past to match the time reference. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× Then when I was 10 years old I bought second bike it.

✓ 'Then when I was 10 years old I bought a second bike.'

Errors: Missing article 'a' before 'second bike' and the extraneous pronoun 'it' at the end. Use past tense 'bought' is correct; keep past tense but correct sentence structure. Suggestion: Include the indefinite article 'a' and remove the redundant 'it' to form a grammatical past-tense sentence. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Yes, almost every children wants to. Belong to your bike.

✓ 'Yes, almost every child wants to own a bike.'

Errors: 'every' should be followed by a singular noun ('child') not plural 'children' (quantifier issue). 'wants to. Belong to your bike.' is ungrammatical: 'wants to own a bike' expresses intended meaning. Also subject-verb agreement ('every child wants'). Suggestion: Replace 'every children' with 'every child', use 'wants to own a bike' to convey possession correctly. Grammar problem type ID: 14