Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise, start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief reason or feeling using linking words. Avoid fillers like "uh" and vague expressions like "what a pity" without context. Aim for 2–3 sentences and a richer verb choice.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Because my family lived in a busy city, my parents thought it was unsafe, so I learned to use public transport instead.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence, then give specific contrasting details using linking words such as "however" or "on the other hand." Correct grammar and word order: use plural/singular properly and complete phrases (e.g. "popular in some provinces" and "roads are flat"). Keep it to 2–4 sentences and provide one concrete example or reason.

例: Overall, bikes are popular in many parts of my country. For example, in flat provinces cycling is common because the roads are easy to ride on; however, in mountainous cities like Chongqing they are less popular because steep roads make cycling difficult and unsafe.

× Uh, what a pity I never had one.

✓ Uh, what a pity I never had a bike.

The original sentence lacks clarity because 'one' is vague; in this context using 'a bike' is more natural. This is a sentence structure and clarity issue—replace the pronoun 'one' with the specific noun to match the question and make the response complete. Also maintain conversational filler 'Uh' as appropriate.

× I don't know exactly actually because my country is huge and in different areas of province they are popular of the bike because they are flat about the road, but in Chongqing not popular because it's too hard to.

✓ I don't know exactly because my country is huge. In some provinces bikes are popular because the roads are flat, but in Chongqing they are not popular because the terrain is very hilly.

The original sentence has multiple structural and grammatical problems: run-on sentence, incorrect word order, wrong prepositions, and unclear phrases. Corrections made: split into two sentences for clarity; use 'some provinces' instead of 'different areas of province'; 'bikes are popular' is clearer than 'they are popular of the bike'; replace 'they are flat about the road' with 'the roads are flat' to correct preposition and word order; 'in Chongqing not popular' corrected to 'in Chongqing they are not popular' to include subject and correct word order; 'because it's too hard to' changed to 'because the terrain is very hilly' to give a complete and grammatical explanation. Suggestions: break long responses into shorter sentences, ensure subjects and verbs are present, use correct prepositions (e.g., 'in', 'because'), and choose precise nouns (terrain, roads) rather than vague phrases.