Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity, grammar and natural phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct the article and word order, remove disfluent sounds (e.g. “1UH”), and add one supporting detail linked naturally. Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small pink bike when I was about seven, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood every afternoon. Because it was light and easy to handle, I learned to ride without stabilizers within a week.

提案: Make the response more natural and concise. Begin with a direct opinion sentence, then add a specific reason and an example using linking words (e.g. “because”, “for example”). Avoid awkward phrasing like “such as by riding.” Keep responses to a maximum of five sentences.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country, especially among people who enjoy outdoor exercise. For example, many cities have cycling lanes and weekend group rides, so lots of families and fitness enthusiasts choose bikes for leisure and commuting.

× Yes, I did 1UH pink bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a pink bike when I was a child.

The original sentence uses 'did' plus a noun phrase which is ungrammatical for possession. In past simple possession you should use the verb 'have' (past form 'had'). Also the numeral/typo '1UH' is incorrect and removed. Use 'I had a pink bike' to correctly express possession in the past tense. Suggestion: Use 'had' for past possession and avoid extraneous characters or typos.

× Yes, I consider that bikes are very popular in my country, especially for all people that enjoy to do outdoor activities such as by riding.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country, especially among people who enjoy outdoor activities such as cycling.

Multiple issues: 'consider that' is grammatical but sounds formal and less natural here; 'for all people that' should be 'among people who' (use 'among' for groups and 'who' for people). 'Enjoy to do' is incorrect — English uses 'enjoy' + gerund, so 'enjoy doing'. The phrase 'such as by riding' is awkward; use 'such as cycling' or 'such as riding bicycles'. Suggestions: use 'think' for natural speech, 'among people who' for group reference, 'enjoy doing' or 'enjoy' + gerund, and prefer 'cycling' for concise expression.