Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with grammar, verb forms and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct past tense and subject-verb agreement, avoid unnecessary words, and add one specific detail to enrich the answer. Use a linking word if you add a reason.

例: Yes, I did. I rode my bike to school every day because my home was quite far away, so cycling was faster than walking.

提案: Make your opinion clearer and avoid vague or incorrect statements. Use appropriate vocabulary (e.g., 'young people' rather than 'in young people'), correct grammar, and avoid odd phrases like 'bikes are always green.' Provide one specific reason and, if possible, a brief example or comparison using a linking word.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular, especially among young people, because they are affordable and convenient for short trips; for example, many students cycle to campus instead of taking the bus.

× I always ride a bike to school because it's far from my home and I likes my bike.

✓ I always rode a bike to school because it was far from my home and I liked my bike.

The question refers to childhood, so past tense should be used. 'ride' and 'likes' are present tense; they must be changed to past tense 'rode' and 'liked'. Also 'it's' should be 'it was' to match past context. Suggestion: when speaking about past habitual actions, use past simple (e.g., I rode, I liked).

× Yes, I think so, especially in young people because they don't have enough money to pay for cars and bikes are always green.

✓ Yes, I think so, especially among young people because they don't have enough money to pay for cars, and bicycles are common.

The phrase 'in young people' is incorrect; use 'among young people' or 'for young people'. Also 'bikes are always green' is likely intended to mean 'bicycles are common' or 'popular'—'always green' is incorrect and literal. Replaced with 'bicycles are common'. Suggestion: choose correct preposition with groups ('among') and use accurate descriptive words rather than literal color statements.