Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Исправьте грамматические ошибки и используйте более естественную структуру: используйте прошедшее время (had, taught, rode), замените некорректные слова (drive → ride, draw → balance или steer), дайте чёткое главное предложение, затем одно-два уточняющих предложения с деталями. Используйте связки (for example, because, so) для логики и избегайте лишних или неуместных слов.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father taught me how to ride it, so I learned to balance and steer quickly. We had quiet roads near our home, which made practicing safe and enjoyable.

提案: Упростите мысль и используйте подходящую лексику: скажите, насколько велосипеды популярны, укажите причины и приведите конкретные примеры. Исправьте неправильные слова (write → ride? or sell?; supermarkets → shops or bike shops), согласование местоимений и использование связок (because, for example, so). Ограничьте ответ до 2–4 предложений.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use them for short trips and commuting because they are cheap and convenient. For example, you can buy a basic bike at local shops, and groups of friends often go cycling together at weekends.

× When I was a child, I have several bikes as my father taught me how to drive and draw.

✓ When I was a child, I had several bikes because my father taught me how to ride them.

Original uses present tense 'have' with a past time marker 'When I was a child', so tense is inconsistent. Also 'drive and draw' are wrong verbs for bicycles: 'ride' is correct, and 'because' better expresses cause than 'as'. Suggest using past simple 'had' and 'taught' and the verb 'ride'.

× There were a lot of roads where we were studying and it was pretty fine.

✓ There were a lot of roads near where we lived, and it was quite nice.

Phrase 'roads where we were studying' is unnatural and likely wrong verb 'studying' for location; 'where we lived' fits context. 'Pretty fine' is awkward; 'quite nice' is a natural collocation. Also combined clause needs a clearer connector. Use past simple 'were' consistent with past context.

× From my perspective, yes, it's highly popular as and we can write at any supermarkets to save time, buy bikes and also we can spend our time with my with our friends outdoors by riding the bikes.

✓ From my perspective, yes, bikes are very popular; we can buy them at many supermarkets to save time, and we can spend time outdoors with our friends riding them.

Original mixes contractions and unclear fragments: 'it's highly popular' should refer to 'bikes' (plural) so use 'bikes are'. 'as and we can write at any supermarkets' is ungrammatical: 'write' is wrong verb and extra 'as' is unnecessary. Use 'buy them at many supermarkets' and maintain plural agreement. Remove duplicate words 'my with our' and use 'spend time outdoors with our friends riding them'. Tense remains present general fact, so present simple is appropriate.