Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense (since the question asks about childhood), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and repetition; correct verb tenses and possessive/number errors (e.g., use "had" not "do have").

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I learned to ride it with my brother while my father taught me basic techniques, and I often practiced in our neighborhood park. Because I was a bit clumsy at first, I sometimes fell and hurt myself, but with practice I became confident enough to ride motorcycles later.

提案: Answer directly and correct vocabulary mistakes ("bags" → "bikes"). Use present tense for general opinions, and link reasons with connectors like "because" or "especially". Provide one specific example or statistic if possible to strengthen your answer.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines. Especially during the COVID-19 pandemic, many people switched to bicycles because public transport like jeepneys was limited for health reasons, and cycling is cheaper and helps avoid crowds.

× Yes, I do have a bike, I usually use it to train myself with my brother and my father teach me and sometimes I get a wound because I tend to be clumsy while using it.

✓ Yes, I had a bike; I usually used it to practice with my brother, and my father taught me. Sometimes I got a wound because I tended to be clumsy while using it.

The original sentence mixes present and past tenses but the question asks about childhood, so past tense should be used. Change 'do have' to 'had' (present vs past), 'usually use' to 'usually used', 'teach' to past 'taught', 'get' to 'got', and 'tend' to 'tended'. Also separate ideas into clearer clauses and use appropriate punctuation. Suggestion: keep all verbs referring to past time in past tense to maintain consistency. Grammar problem type ID:6

× But umm, alongside of that I learned how to ride a bike and right now I know how to ride a motor.

✓ I also learned how to ride a bike, and now I can ride a motorcycle.

The phrase 'alongside of that' is awkward and incorrect in this context; 'also' is more appropriate. 'Right now' is better as 'now' for spoken English. 'Know how to ride a motor' is incorrect word choice; use 'can ride a motorcycle' or 'know how to ride a motorcycle'. Additionally, maintain tense consistency: learning happened in the past, ability in present. Suggestion: use simple connectors ('also') and correct noun 'motorcycle' and modal 'can' for ability. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes, I think that bags are popular in my country, which is the Philippines.

✓ Yes, I think that bikes are popular in my country, the Philippines.

The student likely intended 'bikes' but wrote 'bags' (wrong noun). Also 'which is the Philippines' is wordy; 'the Philippines' is sufficient. Keep present tense here because this is a general statement. Suggestion: correct the noun to 'bikes' and simplify the clause. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Especially when the COVID-19 hits our country, jeepneys and public transportation are affected and it is encouraged to use the bike as an alternative vehicle.

✓ Especially when COVID-19 hit our country, jeepneys and public transportation were affected, and people were encouraged to use bikes as an alternative form of transport.

The event refers to the past, so use past tense: 'hit' instead of 'hits', 'were affected' instead of 'are affected'. 'It is encouraged' is impersonal and present; better as 'people were encouraged'. Use plural 'bikes' and natural phrase 'form of transport' or 'alternative transportation'. Suggestion: match verb tenses to the past event and use natural collocations ('were encouraged', 'bikes', 'transport'). Grammar problem type ID:5