Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural, relevant and concise. To improve further, make your topic sentence slightly stronger and add one specific detail (e.g., a memorable experience or a particular trick) using a linking word for coherence. Keep to no more than five sentences.

例: No, I didn't own a bike as a child, but I often borrowed my brother's. For example, we used to ride to Riverside Park every Saturday, where he taught me how to do a basic wheelie. This routine helped me become more confident on two wheels and made weekends more fun.

提案: Your answer addresses the question and gives reasons, but it contains a pause filler and a sentence fragment. Improve fluency by removing fillers, combining fragments into full sentences, and adding a brief contrasting or predictive detail using a linking word. Use one or two specific examples (e.g., lack of bike lanes in cities) to strengthen your point.

例: No, I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because we lack safe infrastructure. For instance, most cities do not have dedicated bike lanes, so cycling feels unsafe and inconvenient. However, I think this could change if local governments invest in cycle paths and safety campaigns.

× No, I didn't have my own bike as a child, but I often borrowed my brother's bike.

✓ No, I didn't have my own bike as a child, but I often borrowed my brother's.

The original repeats the noun 'bike' unnecessarily, creating redundancy. This is a sentence structure/style issue. Removing the second 'bike' makes the sentence concise while keeping meaning. Suggestion: avoid repeating the same noun when context makes it clear; use a pronoun or omit the repeated noun.

× We would spend weekends exploring local parks and learning tricks together.

✓ We would spend weekends exploring local parks and learning tricks together.

This sentence is grammatical and appropriate for describing habitual past action (would + base verb). No correction needed. Explanation: 'would' correctly indicates repeated past action; structure is correct.

× No, I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. Compared to, uh, other places like Japan.

✓ No, I don't think bikes are very popular in my country compared to other places like Japan.

The original uses a sentence fragment 'Compared to, uh, other places like Japan.' which is incomplete. This is a sentence structure error. Combining the fragment with the previous sentence creates a complete sentence. Also remove filler 'uh' in formal responses. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments by attaching dependent phrases to main clauses.

× We don't have many dedicated bikes like bike lanes or cycle paths, so riding a bike feels less safe and less convenient for most people.

✓ We don't have many dedicated facilities like bike lanes or cycle paths, so riding a bike feels less safe and less convenient for most people.

'Dedicated bikes' is incorrect since 'bike lanes' and 'cycle paths' are facilities, not bikes. This is an incorrect use of nouns/articles (article error/inappropriate noun choice). Replacing 'bikes' with 'facilities' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: choose nouns that accurately describe what you mean (infrastructure vs. vehicles).