Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce repetition, give a clear topic sentence and one or two concise supporting details. Use correct tense and avoid duplicated phrases. For example, say when you got the bike, who gave it to you, and one brief memory or effect (how often you rode or what you learned).

例: Yes, I did. My mother bought me a small red bike when I was seven, and I practiced on it every afternoon until I felt confident. Learning to ride taught me balance and independence, and I still remember the first time I rode without training wheels.

提案: Organize your response with a clear topic sentence, then add two specific supporting points using linking words. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, word order) and avoid filler words. Mention concrete examples (bike-sharing, commuting students, environmental benefits) and use linking words like 'because', 'for example', or 'also'.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, bike-sharing schemes are widespread in cities, so people can simply scan a QR code to rent a bike. As a result, many commuters and students use bicycles for short trips, which also helps reduce traffic and pollution.

× Definitely yes. When I was a child, my mom bought a bike for me and I could ride a bike every day to learn to learn how to ride a bike.

✓ Definitely yes. When I was a child, my mom bought a bike for me and I could ride it every day to learn how to ride a bike.

The sentence uses past tense correctly for 'bought' and 'could', but contains a redundancy 'to learn to learn' and repeats 'ride a bike' awkwardly. Replace the repeated phrase with a clear infinitive 'to learn how to ride a bike' and use the pronoun 'it' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: remove duplicate words and use pronouns for clarity.

× Uh, definitely yes, because nowadays there are a lot of share bikes are near the downtown or in the cities and everyone will can scan the QR code to ride a bike and umm peoples are usually to ride a bike to go work and or student.

✓ Uh, definitely yes, because nowadays there are a lot of shared bikes near downtown and in the cities, and everyone can scan a QR code to ride a bike, and people usually ride a bike to go to work or to school.

Multiple issues fall under present participle/verb form and other categories, but corrections are limited to types in the provided list. The original has incorrect verb forms: 'share bikes' should be the past participle adjective 'shared bikes'; 'are near the downtown' should be 'near downtown'; 'will can' is an impossible combination of modal verbs — use 'can'; 'peoples' is incorrect plural noun form — use 'people'; 'are usually to ride' wrongly uses an infinitive where a simple verb is needed — use 'usually ride'; 'to go work and or student' has missing prepositions and incorrect noun — use 'to go to work or to school'. Suggestions: use 'shared' as adjective, remove redundant auxiliaries, use 'people' not 'peoples', and use correct verb forms and prepositions for purpose/destination.