Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but disorganized and has many hesitations, repetitions and unclear details. To improve, give a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then add one or two specific supporting details (age, type of bike, a short anecdote). Use linking words (for example, “when I was…”, “then”, “because”) and avoid repeating words. Keep the response to no more than five concise sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I got a small four-wheeled bike when I was about five or six years old, because my parents thought it was safer. Later, they helped me remove the extra training wheels so I could learn to balance. I also used to put a small basket on the front to carry my toys.

提案: Your response is short and unclear with many hesitations and fragmented sentences. Improve by giving a direct opinion first, then one or two specific reasons or examples explaining popularity differences (urban vs rural, climate, transport infrastructure). Use linking words such as “because”, “however”, and “for example” to make the answer coherent and limit to three or four sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, they are widely used in smaller towns and cities where traffic is lighter and distances are short. However, in larger western cities people prefer cars or public transport, especially during cold winters.

× Yeah, I I got 1 is umm, I forget maybe it's five years old or six years old, maybe the four wheel with the four wheel bicycle. And I start to to fold the basket after to my parents help me to remove another 2-2 side ones and the back 222 and.

✓ Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. I think I was five or six years old. It was a four-wheel bicycle. I started to fold the basket after my parents helped me remove the two side wheels at the back.

The original contains multiple sentence structure problems: run-on fragments, repetitions, incorrect word order, and missing or incorrect verb forms. Break long, unclear fragments into separate sentences to improve clarity. Use simple past tense consistently for past events (I had, I was, it was, my parents helped). Remove repeated words ('I I', 'to to', '2-2', '222') and replace imprecise phrases ('1 is umm') with clear expressions. Use correct verb forms and objects ('helped me remove the two side wheels') and proper article and number usage ('a four-wheel bicycle'). Suggested improvements: speak in short, complete sentences; plan the timeline (age, description, sequence of actions); avoid repetitions and filler words.

× Yeah, really popular. I will tell you how, because in in, in, in the depends which city, you know, which area And the first of all in like the, in the western or the, the, the West in specially in westerns, you are really large, you know the city, the place and the winter coming is definitely really cold.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular. It depends on the city and the area. For example, in the west, cities are generally large, and winters there are definitely very cold.

The original sentence has excessive fillers, repetition, and disorganized structure. Use clear subject-verb phrases and remove repeated words ('in in, in, in', 'the, the, the'). Match subject and verb tense ('bikes are very popular', 'it depends'). Use appropriate articles and adjectives ('in the west', 'cities are generally large'). Replace vague phrases with concise examples ('for example, in the west'). Keep clauses short and logical. Suggested improvements: organize ideas (general statement, qualification, example), avoid filler words, and use correct present simple for general facts and present continuous only when needed.