Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Keep your answer concise and directly address the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words (for example, because and so) to make your explanation coherent. Also correct grammar issues (e.g., tense and article use) and remove irrelevant or uncertain statements (e.g., "I think so").

例: No, I didn't have a bike as a child. My parents didn't allow it because I was their only child and they were worried about my safety, especially since owning a bike was also restricted in our area.

提案: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then give two specific reasons with supporting details. Use appropriate linking words (for example, because, therefore, and especially) and correct grammar (plural/singular, articles). Avoid vague phrases like "simple for those who."

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to travel short distances. For example, many people use bikes to navigate narrow streets and avoid traffic, and they are especially common among students and delivery workers.

× No, my parents didn't allow me because I was in my childhood and they were.

✓ No, my parents didn't allow me because I was a child.

The phrase 'in my childhood' is awkward in spoken English; use 'a child'. 'They were' is incomplete and unnecessary. Keep past tense consistent: 'didn't allow' and 'I was' are correct, but simplify to 'I was a child.' Suggestion: use concise phrasing: 'No, my parents didn't allow me because I was a child.'

× They used to think about me because I am a single child of my parents and it is also illegal to own a bike in my country as well and I think so.

✓ They used to worry about me because I am an only child, and it is illegal to own a bike in my country.

Use 'worry about' or 'be concerned about' rather than 'think about' in this context. 'Single child of my parents' is incorrect; use 'only child.' 'As well' and 'also' are redundant; keep one. 'I think so' is vague and unnecessary. Maintain present tense for permanent facts ('I am an only child') and present simple for laws ('it is illegal').

× In my opinion, bikes are quite popular in my country because it is a proper way to travel and in the simple kind of the street.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are a convenient way to travel, especially on simple streets.

Subject agreement: 'bikes' is plural so use 'they are' not 'it is.' 'Proper way' is unnatural; 'convenient way' fits better. 'In the simple kind of the street' is ungrammatical—use 'especially on simple streets' to express meaning clearly.

× So bike is the easiest way to go and communicate to the travelling and it is also simple for the those who.

✓ So bikes are the easiest way to get around and travel, and they are also convenient for many people.

Use plural 'bikes' to match 'are.' 'Easiest way to go and communicate to the travelling' is ungrammatical and unclear; 'get around and travel' conveys the idea. 'It is also simple for the those who' is incomplete; replace with 'they are also convenient for many people.' Maintain plural consistency and complete the thought.