Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and grammatical: use past continuous or simple past consistently, correct collocations, and add one or two brief supporting details using a linking word. Keep it under 5 sentences. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add a reason or a short memory.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I usually travelled by car because my parents preferred driving us to school and activities. As a result, I didn't learn to ride until I was a teenager.

提案: Make the response more fluent and avoid hesitations and repetition. Provide a clear topic sentence, then expand with specific supporting details and a linking word (e.g., "however", "also"). Correct grammar ("many of us commute") and use concise vocabulary. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

例: Bicycles are not very popular in my country because there are few dedicated bike lanes. Therefore, most people prefer public transport, cars, or motorcycles for safety and convenience. However, cycling is becoming more common in some cities where local governments have started building bike paths.

× I always commute with car.

✓ I always commute by car.

The original sentence uses an incorrect preposition and article with the mode of transport. English uses the preposition by with means of transport (by car, by bus) and usually omits the article in this expression. Replace 'with car' with 'by car' to be grammatical and natural.

× Instead, we many of us commuted.

✓ Instead, many of us commuted.

The original sentence contains an extra pronoun 'we' before 'many of us', which is redundant and ungrammatical. Remove the extra 'we' so the subject phrase is 'many of us'. Also note that 'commuted' (past tense) may conflict with surrounding present-tense discussion; in the transcript the speaker seems to be explaining a general current situation, so present tense 'commute' could also be correct depending on intended meaning.

× Many of us commute with, uh, public transportation or private cars or motorcycles.

✓ Many of us commute by public transportation or by private car or by motorcycle.

The original sentence uses 'commute with' which is not the standard collocation in English; the correct preposition is by. Also the list mixes plural and singular forms inconsistently ('private cars' vs 'motorcycles'); using 'by private car' and 'by motorcycle' is more natural. Repeating 'by' before each item clarifies the sentence structure and improves parallelism.