Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and clarity: use past tense consistently, correct article use, and make the answer one clear sentence followed by a brief supporting detail. Include a linking word if adding a reason or memory. For example, say you had a bike, who gave it to you, and one short detail about how it affected you.

例: Yes, I did. My father gave me a bike when I was a child, and I used to ride it to the park every weekend.

提案: Work on grammar, word order and cohesion: use correct sentence structures (e.g., “bikes are popular”) and linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example”). Be specific about who and why (commuters, fitness enthusiasts) and avoid filler words. Keep it to two or three clear sentences.

例: Yes, bikes have become more popular in my country since the COVID-19 pandemic because many people choose cycling for exercise and short commutes. For example, teenagers often cycle to school, while adults use bikes for leisure or to avoid crowded public transport.

× Yes I have.

✓ Yes, I did.

The question 'Did you have a bike when you were a child?' is in the past tense, so the response must use past tense. 'Yes I have' uses present perfect and is inappropriate here. Use simple past 'did' to match the question. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for natural punctuation.

× When I was child my father GI gave me a a bike.

✓ When I was a child my father gave me a bike.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' is an article error and also there is a duplicated 'a' before 'bike'. The phrase 'GI' appears extraneous and likely a typo; it was removed. Use 'a child' and a single 'a bike' to form a correct noun phrase. Also include a comma after the introductory clause if desired: 'When I was a child, my father gave me a bike.'

× Recently, around three years after COVID-19, people in my country popular using transportation bike and using bike for exercise.

✓ Recently, about three years after COVID-19, people in my country have become popular with using bikes for transportation and for exercise.

The original sentence uses 'popular' incorrectly as a verb; this is an incorrect use of adjectives/verbs and a present tense usage problem. To express a change that started in the recent past and continues, use 'have become' (present perfect). Also 'using transportation bike' is ungrammatical: 'using bikes for transportation' is correct. Plural 'bikes' is required. Replace 'around' with 'about' for naturalness. Alternatively: 'people in my country have started using bikes more for transportation and exercise.'

× So many people like a teenager and uh, adults people using bike.

✓ Many people, including teenagers and adults, are using bikes.

The phrase 'like a teenager and uh, adults people' is ungrammatical: 'like' should be 'including' or 'such as', 'a teenager' should be plural 'teenagers', and 'adults people' is redundant; use 'adults'. Also change word order to a full clause with auxiliary verb: 'are using bikes'. Plural 'bikes' is required. Remove filler 'uh' in formal correction.