Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate, concise, and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb tenses and possessive forms, and avoid redundant phrases. Add one or two specific supporting details linked with simple connectors (e.g., “and,” “so,” “because”).

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me as a present, and it was black. I used to ride it to school and around the neighborhood, so it was my favorite toy because it made me feel free and independent.

提案: Be more precise and avoid repetition. Give a clear topic sentence, then use linking words to present specific examples. Correct grammar (plural/singular, verb forms) and choose context-appropriate vocabulary (e.g., “commute,” “run errands”).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use them to commute and run errands; for example, they ride to the market to buy groceries or cycle to the gym and the park for exercise.

× Yes, in my early age I have a bike.

✓ Yes, when I was young I had a bike.

The sentence uses present tense 'have' but refers to a past time ('early age'/'when I was young'), so past tense 'had' is required. Also 'in my early age' is unnatural; use 'when I was young' or 'in my early years'. Suggestion: Use time expressions that match past tense and change verbs accordingly.

× My father gift me that bike.

✓ My father gave me that bike.

The verb 'gift' is not correct in simple past form here. The correct past tense of 'give' is 'gave'. Use 'gave me' to indicate a past action. Suggestion: Use regular past tense forms or the correct irregular past ('give'→'gave').

× The color of that bike is was black and it was the my favorite thing I ever played.

✓ The color of that bike was black and it was my favorite thing to play with.

Several issues: 'is was' mixes present and past — use past 'was' to match context. 'the my' incorrectly combines definite article with possessive pronoun; drop 'the'. 'favorite thing I ever played' is ungrammatical — use 'favorite thing to play with' or 'my favorite toy'. Suggestion: Keep verb tense consistent, do not use 'the' before possessive pronouns, and use appropriate verb patterns ('play with' for objects).

× Yes, in my opinion bikes are very popular in my country.

✓ Yes, in my opinion, bikes are very popular in my country.

This sentence is mostly correct but needs a comma after 'in my opinion' for clarity. Tense is appropriate (present general statement). Suggestion: Add commas to set off introductory phrases.

× People use bikes for several functions.

✓ People use bikes for several purposes.

'Functions' is awkward here; 'purposes' or 'reasons' is more natural. Preposition 'for' is fine. Suggestion: Use 'purposes' to describe different uses of bikes.

× For example, they use them for buying groceries and sometimes they also wrote their ride their bicycle to the gym and they also go to the parks.

✓ For example, they use them to buy groceries; sometimes they also ride their bicycles to the gym, and they also go to the park.

Multiple errors: 'use them for buying groceries' is better as 'use them to buy groceries' (infinitive after 'use' for purpose). 'they also wrote their ride their bicycle' is garbled — 'wrote' is incorrect; 'ride their bicycles' is correct present habitual. 'the parks' should be 'the park' or 'parks' without 'the' depending on meaning; 'go to the park' is more natural. Suggestion: Use infinitive after 'use' to indicate purpose, correct verb forms for habitual actions (present simple), and choose appropriate article use for place nouns.