Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: You did not answer the question. Begin with a direct topic sentence that answers the question (Yes/No) and then add 1–2 specific supporting details. Keep it natural and concise, avoid greetings or irrelevant phrases. Use linking words (for example, because, so, when) to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child. I rode it almost every day to visit my friends and to go to the park because it was my main way to get around. As a result, I became quite confident riding on busy streets by the time I was ten.

提案: This response does not address the question. Start with a clear opinion (Yes/No/Somewhat) and follow with 1–2 specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (for example, because, however, for instance) and relevant vocabulary (commute, cycle lanes, popular, environmentally friendly). Keep to a maximum of five sentences and avoid filler words.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities. Many people use them to commute short distances because bike lanes are common and it is cheaper than driving. For example, I see many office workers and students cycling to work or school every day.

× Hello, how are you? So, umm, I'm also glad to uh, to join with you and as a good version that's very better.

✓ Hello, how are you? I'm glad to join you and to practice speaking; I think this is a good opportunity.

The original contains incorrect and unclear pronoun use and awkward phrasing ('join with you', 'as a good version that's very better'). 'Join you' is the correct phrase (no 'with'); 'as a good version' is unclear and was replaced with 'to practice speaking' to match context. Remove redundant 'to' before 'join' and simplify comparative phrase 'very better' which is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use clear subjects and objects, avoid unnecessary fillers, and use standard collocations like 'join you' and 'practice speaking'.

× So I'm selecting a search a lot into your school for and I like speaking practice.

✓ I have been searching for schools like yours and I enjoy speaking practice.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and uses verbs wrongly ('I'm selecting a search a lot into your school for'). The corrected version uses the present perfect progressive idea 'have been searching' to express recent activity and correct prepositional phrase 'for schools like yours'. 'I enjoy speaking practice' is a clear, grammatical alternative to 'I like speaking practice'. Suggestion: use correct verb patterns (search for something), simplify phrases, and place modifiers (like frequency) appropriately.

× It's so better. I'm thank you so much for your.

✓ It is much better. Thank you very much for your help.

'So better' is nonstandard; use 'much better' or 'so much better'. 'I'm thank you so much for your' mixes forms and omits the noun 'help' or 'time'. Corrected to 'Thank you very much for your help' which is a standard expression of gratitude. Suggestion: use correct adjective/adverb collocations and include the object after possessive pronouns (your help, your time).