Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, clarity and fluency. Begin with a clear topic sentence in the past tense, avoid hesitations, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, correct tense (I had), remove fillers, and give a brief detail (where you rode, how often, or a memory). Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it almost every day around my neighborhood, especially after school, which helped me feel independent and fit.

提案: Answer directly with a clear statement, use correct grammar and linking words, and provide a specific reason or example. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use present simple for general facts (are popular) and give concrete supporting details (who uses bikes, where, or why).

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many children and adults use them for short trips. For instance, children often ride to school and families cycle together in parks on weekends.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was child and I like to do my uh.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I liked to ride it.

Mixing present tense 'have' and 'like' with past time 'when I was a child' is incorrect. Use past tense 'had' for possession in the past and 'liked' for past habit. Also add the article 'a' before 'child' and replace the vague 'do my uh' with the appropriate verb 'ride it'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently for past events and use clear verbs for activities.

× Yes, I think uh bikes are popular in my country because every small kid like to do uh bike and even me I tried bike as well.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because every small kid likes to ride a bike, and I tried riding a bike as well.

The subject 'every small kid' is singular and requires the third person singular verb form 'likes' (subject-verb agreement). Also use 'ride a bike' rather than 'do bike' and include articles ('a bike'). 'Even me' is informal; rephrase as 'and I' or 'and I have also'. Use consistent verb forms: 'tried riding a bike' or 'I also tried riding a bike'. Suggestion: match singular subjects with singular verbs, use correct verbs for activities, and include necessary articles.