Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, fix contradictions, use correct grammar (e.g. past simple and past continuous), and give one or two specific supporting details. Keep it under five sentences and avoid filler words.

例: Yes. I had a bike from about age seven. My father taught me to ride and practiced with me every day for about two hours until I felt confident. Because of that regular practice, I learned to ride quickly and became more independent.

提案: Answer directly and clearly, use linking words to structure reasons, and give specific examples or facts. Avoid vague phrases and fillers, and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement and clearer expressions).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people cycle for exercise or leisure on weekends, and you often see crowded bike lanes in parks. As a result, weekend cycling sometimes increases local traffic and makes certain paths busy.

× Yes, I didn't have a bike when I was very young.

✓ Yes, I didn't have a bike when I was very young.

No correction needed: sentence already correctly uses past simple negative to describe possession in the past. Keep as is.

× My father used to help me bicycle daily for two hours.

✓ My father used to help me learn to ride a bicycle for two hours every day.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear: 'help me bicycle' is not a natural collocation in English. This is a sentence structure and verb choice issue. 'Used to' correctly marks a past habitual action, so keep it. Replace 'help me bicycle' with 'help me learn to ride a bicycle' to clarify the action, and change 'daily for two hours' to 'for two hours every day' for natural word order. Suggestion: use clear verb phrases like 'learn to ride' and prefer 'every day' or 'daily' in a consistent position.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country, uh, most of the people on their own weekend and it creates traffic here and there.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country. Most people ride them on weekends, and this creates traffic here and there.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. Problems include missing verb ('on their own weekend' has no verb), awkward phrasing, and run-on structure. Break into two sentences for clarity. Use 'Most people ride them on weekends' to express the idea that many people use bikes at weekends. Use 'this creates traffic' to show cause. Suggestion: ensure each clause has a subject and verb, avoid filler words like 'uh' in formal responses, and split long ideas into separate sentences.