Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear, natural and directly responds to the question with an appropriate topic sentence and brief detail. To improve further, add one more specific supporting detail (e.g., how you used the bike or a memory) and use a linking word to connect sentences. Keep the response concise (no more than five sentences) and avoid simple fragments.

例: Yes, I did. My father bought it for me when I was about seven years old, and I used to ride it to visit my grandparents every weekend. Because the bike had a bright red frame, it was easy to spot in the yard and I always felt proud riding it.

提案: Your answer addresses the question and gives a reason and example, but contains grammar and word-choice errors and a lack of clarity. Improve by correcting grammar (use plural/singular and articles), using clearer linking words, and providing a specific, coherent example. Aim for one clear topic sentence, then one or two supporting sentences with correct vocabulary and sentence structure.

例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because the roads are poorly organized. For example, cyclists often have to share narrow lanes with buses and cars, which makes riding unsafe, so many people prefer motorbikes or cars instead.

× Yes I did. My father bought it for me when I was about 7 years old.

✓ Yes, I did. My father bought it for me when I was about 7 years old.

The original sentence is correct in tense and structure but missing a comma after 'Yes' for natural written English. Suggestion: add a comma after interjections like 'Yes' to improve punctuation and clarity.

× Unfortunately I don't think bikes are popular in my country since the road organization is fairly poor.

✓ Unfortunately, I don't think bikes are popular in my country because road organization is fairly poor.

Issues: missing comma after 'Unfortunately' and the conjunction 'since' can imply time; 'because' is clearer to express cause. Also 'the road organization' is awkward—remove 'the' for a general statement. Suggestion: use 'Unfortunately,', replace 'since' with 'because', and omit the definite article for general concepts.

× For example, biker usually has have to ride with boss and other cars.

✓ For example, bikers usually have to ride alongside buses and other cars.

Multiple errors: plural/singular ('biker' -> 'bikers') and subject-verb agreement ('has have' is incorrect; use 'have to'). Word choice errors: 'boss' is wrong word—likely 'buses'; preposition 'with' is awkward—use 'alongside' or 'among'. Suggestion: make the subject plural to match 'usually', use 'have to' for obligation, correct 'boss' to 'buses', and use 'alongside' for clearer meaning.