Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitations and redundant phrases, and correct tense/word choice (e.g., "I had" not "I do got").

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. At first I found it difficult and fell off several times, but after practicing for a few weeks I learned to ride steadily. The experience taught me patience and improved my balance.

提案: Give a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons and one short example. Use linking words (for example, because, however) and avoid fillers. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "cycle lanes" instead of "separate ways").

例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because there are few dedicated cycle lanes and riding on busy main roads is dangerous. As a result, most adults prefer motorbikes or cars, and cycling is mainly something children do for fun.

× I think by bike you meant that do I have a cycle?

✓ I think by 'bike' you meant 'cycle'.

The original uses an incorrect clause 'meant that do I have a cycle?' which mixes direct question form and reported speech. Use a simple statement to clarify meaning: 'you meant 'cycle''. Suggestion: Say 'I think by bike you meant cycle.' (Grammar problem type ID: 12)

× Uh, yes I do got a cycle, uh, during my childhood and I land it with a lot of difficulties.

✓ Yes, I had a cycle during my childhood, and I learned to ride it with a lot of difficulty.

'Do got' is incorrect; the past simple 'had' should be used for possession in the past. 'Land it' is wrong collocation; the correct verb is 'ride'. 'Learned' is the past simple of 'learn'. Use singular 'difficulty' or 'many difficulties' depending on meaning. Suggestion: 'Yes, I had a cycle during my childhood, and I learned to ride it with a lot of difficulty.' (Grammar problem type ID: 9)

× But first I had severe several falls from that cycle and then only I had learned to.

✓ At first I had several severe falls from that cycle, and only after that did I learn to ride it.

Word order and tense are awkward. Use 'at first' to express sequence, 'several severe falls' uses correct adjective order, and 'did I learn' is the correct auxiliary inversion for past simple in a temporal clause. Complete the verb 'ride'. (Grammar problem type ID: 5)

× In my country I think bikes are not that popular because, uh, here we do not have separate ways for cycling and we have to cycle through main roads itself, uh, in the middle of lot of traffic.

✓ In my country I think bikes are not very popular because we do not have separate cycle lanes, so we have to ride on main roads amid a lot of traffic.

Use 'not very popular' rather than 'not that popular' for clarity. 'Separate ways for cycling' is non-idiomatic; 'cycle lanes' or 'bike lanes' is correct. 'Cycle through main roads itself' is incorrect; use 'ride on main roads'. 'In the middle of lot of traffic' should be 'amid a lot of traffic'. Maintain present tense. (Grammar problem type ID: 6)

× So here only children I think use cycles the most.

✓ So here, I think children use cycles the most.

Word order and emphasis are awkward. Place the subject 'children' before the verb 'use' and include a comma after 'here'. The auxiliary 'do' is not needed. This corrects subject-verb agreement and natural word order. (Grammar problem type ID: 27)