Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, with a direct response and personal detail. To improve, make the answer more concise (max 5 sentences), remove repetitions, add a linking word to connect ideas, and include one specific detail or brief reflection to enrich content. Also watch pronunciation/fluency to avoid repeated words.

例: Yes — I had a bike when I was about six. My father bought it for my birthday, and I felt really proud because I could ride it without training wheels. That independence made me more confident when playing outside with friends.

提案: Good direct opinion and reason, but reduce hesitations (uh, umm), correct vocabulary (say 'bike lanes' or 'cycle lanes'), and expand one specific supporting detail or brief example. Use a linking phrase to present the reason clearly and make the sentence structure smoother.

例: In my opinion, bicycles are not very popular in my country. The main reason is that there is insufficient cycling infrastructure: for example, we rarely have dedicated bike lanes on busy streets, which makes riding unsafe for most people.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was about 6 and my father bought it for me as a birthday present and I remember that I I felt so proud of myself because I could ride without training wheels. Training wheels.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was about six, and my father bought it for me as a birthday present. I remember that I felt very proud of myself because I could ride without training wheels.

Run-on sentence and repetition: The original contains two independent clauses joined without proper punctuation, a repeated word 'I', and an abrupt fragment 'Training wheels.' Corrections: split into two sentences, remove the repeated 'I', spell out 'six' for style, insert a comma before 'and' to join short independent clauses or better split sentences, and remove the fragment. These changes keep the past-tense narrative consistent and improve clarity. Suggestion: Keep past-tense verbs (had, bought, remembered, felt, could) consistent and avoid repeating words or sentence fragments.

× Uh, well, in my opinion, bicycles are not very popular in my country. One reason is that, uh, the government doesn't provide umm uh, enough cycling infrastructure and we don't have suitable bikes line lanes in our street.

✓ Uh, well, in my opinion, bicycles are not very popular in my country. One reason is that the government doesn't provide enough cycling infrastructure, and we don't have suitable bike lanes on our streets.

Preposition and word choice errors: 'bikes line lanes' is incorrect word order and choice; correct term is 'bike lanes'. 'in our street' is unnatural here; use 'on our streets' (plural) to match general statement. Also removed filler sounds and added a comma before 'and' to join clauses clearly. These corrections fix preposition use and noun phrase order while keeping present-tense general statement appropriate. Suggestion: Use 'bike lanes' for dedicated cycling paths and pair with 'on' when referring to streets; use plural 'streets' for general statements.