Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but too short and slightly unnatural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (where you rode it, who taught you, or a memory). Use linking words like 'and' or 'because' to connect ideas and avoid unnecessary articles (say 'a bike' rather than 'the bike'). Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I learned to ride it in my neighborhood park, and my older brother helped me practice every weekend. I remember feeling very proud when I could ride without training wheels.

提案: The answer attempts a comparison but is grammatically incorrect and vague. Begin with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons or examples. Use linking words such as 'but' or 'however' correctly and make comparisons explicit (e.g., 'not as popular as in Amsterdam'). Provide one or two concrete reasons why popularity differs (infrastructure, culture, distance).

例: Yes, bicycles are fairly popular in my country, but not as much as in cities like Amsterdam. This is mainly because our cities have fewer bike lanes and longer distances between home and work, so many people prefer cars or public transport.

× Yes, I had the bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The definite article 'the' implies a specific bike already known to the listener, but the examiner asked generally if the student had a bike as a child. Use the indefinite article 'a' for a non-specific, singular, countable noun. Suggestion: use 'a' when introducing something not previously mentioned or not specific (e.g., 'I had a bike').

× Yes, I think so, but is not so popular, like for example in Amsterdam.

✓ Yes, I think so, but bikes are not as popular here as they are in places like Amsterdam.

The original sentence omits the subject for the second clause ('is not so popular') and uses an awkward comparative phrase ('like for example in Amsterdam'). This is a sentence structure and subject omission issue. Correction supplies the subject 'bikes', uses a clearer comparative structure 'not as popular here as they are in places like Amsterdam', and removes redundant words. Suggestion: always include the subject in each clause and use clear comparative forms ('not as... as').