Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문법과 시제 사용을 수정하세요. 과거 경험을 말할 때는 과거 시제를 사용하고, 문장은 주어+동사 형태로 명확히 시작하세요. 또한 한두 문장으로 간단한 추가 세부정보(언제, 얼마나 자주, 누구와 등)를 덧붙이면 자연스럽습니다. 예를 들어 ‘Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it to go to school every day’처럼 구체적으로 말하세요.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it almost every day to ride to my friend’s house and to the park, and I remember practicing until I could ride without training wheels.

提案: 의미 전달이 불분명하고 문장이 단절되어 있습니다. 질문에는 직접적인 주제 문장으로 답한 뒤 이유나 예시를 덧붙이세요. 연결어(for example, because)를 사용해 논리적으로 이어야 합니다. 또한 문법적으로 올바른 표현(예: “My friends and I”)을 사용하고 문장 전체를 완성하세요.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, when I was growing up my friends and I often rode bikes to the park, and parents encouraged children to learn cycling for safety and fitness.

× Yes, I ride a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I rode a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'ride' with past time marker 'when I was a child'. Use the simple past 'rode' to match the past time reference. Suggestion: use past tense verbs for actions that occurred in the past; practice forming irregular past verbs like 'ride' → 'rode'.

× Yes. When I was a child. Me and my friends. Learning from parents write up.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, my friends and I learned from our parents how to ride a bike.

The original consists of sentence fragments and incorrect word order/pronoun case. 'Me and my friends' should be 'my friends and I' as the subject. 'Learning from parents write up' is ungrammatical: use past tense 'learned' and add possessive 'our parents' and a clear object 'how to ride a bike'. Suggestion: combine fragments into a complete sentence with subject + verb + object and use past tense for past events.